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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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This is fine, the 13 looking 15 things can be a trait used to make characters seem better than they actually are, so be careful with that. Thirteen-year-olds having breasts is actually pretty average and common so that added comment wasn't necessary.
She does seem to have a pretty realistic personality, so I can only recommend adding more detail and adding some more unique traits, along with some more unique and rare hobbies.
Relationships
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All I can say is to develop these relationships further than just a title and makes sure that they are shown in any piece of media you decide to show this character in.
Backstory
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This needs more of an explanation in my eyes, why would people stop talking to her because she saved somebody? All these needs are further development and I recommend figuring out a stable backstory, you can always change it later since this character is just in your head.
Other
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It's cool giving your character a lot of pets, just make sure that this can work logically and she can look after all of these animals.
As for her fighting style, unless she's been trained from a young age to fight like this. It's very rare that someone this young will be able to fight well and have such a well-planned style of doing so.
Stats
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Skill means how skilled she is, normally referring to having a knack for doing things.
These stats are fine, there's not really anything for me to say here.
Final thoughts This character seems pretty grounded in reality, even if a little basic but that isn't always a bad thing. Some further development could really add to this character and make her better, but she sounds like a decent character anyway.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
