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I got requested to review my first creepypasta oc! Here is a character by dadd_gasm
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding / character information
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For a creepypasta oc, this is pretty good. I'm sick of seeing creepypasta characters where their design isn't actually creepy. Seeing this creature in real life would be horrific. I like the mix of hobbies, but the darker hobbies are pretty common ones. Most CP have very trademark ways of killing, so maybe adding more detailed, twisted hobbies could make her more unique.
Do not give her a love interest. She's a supernatural entity that's a killer, don't give her romantic feelings for anyone because that makes her less scary.
Be careful putting her on the same level as Slenderman and Zalgo, these are incredibly powerful beings, your character could be called out on copying these guys, but as long as she doesn't attack on the same way as them, it should be fine.
Relationships
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'Relationship status: Eaten' ??????? What does this even mean? Admittedly, I found this funny. I don't know if I'm just completely out the loop of something and I'm just being dense or if this is an actual phrase.
Anyway, this is fine for the most part. In the cp universe, I don't think fangirls would be as common, they're scarily common in this world, but these characters are fictional to us. They wouldn't necessarily be her enemies since she clearly has bigger fish to fry. Also be careful having her go up against so of the biggest characters in this industry.
Backstory
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With horror characters and especially cp, my only recommendation is don't explain everything, the more mystery around a character, the more scary they are. Slenderman was a scary character way back when there was no information about him apart from a spooky story and a couple of cryptic images. The more information and backstory given to Slenderman, the less scary he got. Use the fear of the unknown to your advantage. I really like the concept of an unknown creature being pulled out of the ground, so don't explain her origins as much as you would if she were a character from a different universe.
Other /stats
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The fighting style is fine, the stats not so much. When given a range of numbers to make stats out of, never go beyond the range. It makes your character seem incredibly over powered. 5 is the best of the best, 4 is above average, 3 is average. Normally I recommend having one 5 at most.
Final thoughts I was honestly scared to review a cp character due to the reputation ocs from this universe have gained, but I was pleasantly surprised. This is a pretty good creepypasta oc, so good job!!
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you of course do not have to listen to what I've said. This us all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
