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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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Alright these ar honestly my favourite type of hp ocs.
Character information
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I really like the sound of this character, she sounds really well developed and thought out and her appearance is very unique and realistic at the same time. This is really well done for the most part, however I suggest putting some more detail into her personality to make her feel a bit more fleshed out.
Relationships
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This works really well so there isn't much for me to say here. However, do be careful with the enemies because you don't want it to sound like you're writing another Draco character.
Backstory
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This works well for her and fits into the universe nicely, though I think that you could add some more detail and think of some more important events that take place in her life to make her feel more real.
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This is cool and I have nothing to add here.
Stats
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Stats are balanced so I don't have anything to add here really.
Final thoughts I really like the sound of this character. She's well thought out and developed but I think that somethings could be improved and added to in order to make things flow better and make her more realistic. Apart from that, really good job!
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
