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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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Alright this is interesting but you've gotta figure out how this works because you can just jump form nothing to everything in any situation, not to mention that technology needs to advance over time even though I would imagine it be easier with supernatural beings.
Character information
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She sounds pretty good so far and I like her. All I can really say is to add more detail on her appearance (like height, weight, body tye, etc) and personality.
Also you added the hobbies bit but didn't actually tell me what they are so maybe add that or come up with some of you haven't already.
Relationships
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There's no issues here and they sound like we'll done and thought out Relationships. Good job.
Backstory
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Alright so I'm not sure if you just haven't come up with one, you couldn't be bother or it's like a secret thing but either way, a character needs a Backstory. Everyone has a past and that's what makes them who they are. You have to figure out her past even if it's average and bland it doesn't matter. You gotta have some evidence and notes on a character's history.
Other
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Careful not to make her too op and also make sure to mention training at some point so makes sense that she knows how to use her weapons.
Stats
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Stats are almost balanced but I recommend balancing that five out with a 1.
Extra
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Sounds cool.
Final thoughts Overall I like this character but I feel like she needs more detail and some further fleshing out so that she feels more developed.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
