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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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Alright cool, some interesting inspiration here.
Character information
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Is it possible for mechanical beings to have a sexuality? I guess it can work but maybe think about that one a bit more.
Most of this works I guess but his personality needs work. It should at least be a paragraph of information regarding how they act and what they do. Also maybe add some more hobbies to make him more fleshed out.
Relationships
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He's a robot so this works, but if he does have these relatives then please put them because I'm rveieing a character, not a potential future story.
Otherwise, I suppose this can work but surely he'll have some contact with another humanoid being at some point. You do mention later on that there are other incarnations, so surely they should have the chance to interact.
Backstory
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You gotta remember the reader can't see in your head, so you have to describe this stuff really well, especially when coming up with new concepts.
You need to add more detail, especially with the whole force of nature awakening in him.
Overall just more development.
Other
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Alright that is a lot of abilities/powers so maybe dial that down a bit to make him less op and balanced.
You also gotta explain this whole incarnation thing more because this is the first time it's been mentioned and you have to explain this stuff to the reader, it can be in hints in the story but you gotta explain it fully to me for me to be able to comment on it.
Stats
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I know he isn't human but these stats are pretty high. 5s should be balanced out with a 1 and the rest should be dispersed evenly to make sure the character is blanaced and leveled out.
Final thoughts This character could be pretty good and interesting but you need to develop him more and find a clear explanation to the core concepts, so he's easier to understand and be more likable.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
