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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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Alright sounds neat, I got a soft spot for modern fantasy.
Character information
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Alright I like her so far, she's a pretty well balanced and natural sounding character, so good job. All I can really say to improve on is to write a paragraph on the characters personality instead of having one word traits because these one words could be shown in different ways. Also maybe add a couple more hobbies not related to her profession.
Relationships
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This is actually very good as far as Relationships go. It's nice to see good relationships with parents and healthy sibling bonds. All I can really ask of you is to build up on the relationship with Melanie but honetsly I'm sure you're already working on it.
Backstory
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I actually quite like this Backstory. There's nothing wrong with it and it makes sense in the universe. It seems pretty realistic for what we're dealing with and she seems to be a good person. The only issue I have is with the case, where did he get it from? If the supernatural is hidden from people, it would be hard to just buy it from a simple store, so maybe just think that through. But apart from that, this is a great story for a protag.
Other
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These are well thought out and it makes sense why she has these powers, no issues here.
Stats
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Maybe lower a couple of these to balanced out the fours but there's not really an issue here.
Final thoughts This character is pretty good and I like the sound of her. Just do a couple of tweaks here and there and she should be good to go.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
