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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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She sounds pretty interesting so far, you don't actually see many LGBTQ+ Hunger games ocs so that's pretty refreshing.
Though, her personality is pretty common, so I recommend adding some more unique and rare personality traits to make her stick out from the crowd. I don't think this is that big of an issue though considering that HG ocs aren't common nowadays so she sticks out pretty well anyway.
However, I do recommend adding some more hobbies because a lot of people have more than two hobbies, but in this universe, it does make sense to only have a few past-times.
Relationships
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These relationships make sense, just make sure that they are well displayed and presented in the story.
Backstory
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The only problem I really have here is the sibling getting reaped in their first time in the reaping is incredibly rare and it's exactly what happens in the series with Prim. Whilst she doesn't volunteer and obviously she can't, she's too young. I do commend you on letting him die though. Maybe making him a good friend or a cousin could make this work better.
Apart from that, I think this is a pretty good backstory as long at it is well explained in her story.
Other
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I think fighting styles would be important for a game that involves killing, but if she's untrained, she doesn't have to have a sharp fighting style. In fact, characters with no developed fighting style but have some level of skill are some of the most interesting because it's hard to predict their moves.
Stats
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Most of these stats are pretty high, I recommend giving her at least one 1 in order to balance out the five you've given her, because that way she remains a balanced and level character.
Final thoughts Overall, I really like this character. In my opinion, she only needs a couple of adjustments and some further development to be an incredible character. So, good job!
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
