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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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This character is well done by the sounds of things. All I can really say here is be careful making her origin story be at such a young age and make sure she has a wide range of hobbies to make her feel more real.
Relationships
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Considering the backstory, be careful having her kill her parents. It is not an easy thing to do, especially as such a young age and considering her personality. I'm not shaking you have to change this, but you should either change this or make her more sociopathic.
Also good job on making her not have feelings for anyone.
Backstory
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How did her friends die? Whilst this makes sense, make sure if you write this there's a slow build and it's detailed enough to work. If that makes sense?
Other
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Most of this is fine, just be cautious giving her such strong abilities because they could come across as overpowered but it will work if not overdone.
Stats
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These stats are pretty balanced and well done so I don't have anything to really say here.
Final thoughts This is a pretty good creepypasta oc and you've done a lot of good things here, a few adjustments here and there could really add to this character. I like this character a lot, so good job.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
