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Review by Grey: Little Encounters

Title: Little Encounters

Author: leoungV

Reviewer: Oya_Onigiri

Summary: [no score]

As the summary just has one line, I won't be giving it any points.

As the plot of your book is simple, the summary fits it, but you can add things related to time and waiting.

Characters: 3/5

Your main character, Lyra, is kinda like a side character. We don't know much about her, her likes, dislikes, personality and looks. All we know about her is that she is a high schooler and her time schedule.

Tristan, the supposedly mysterious boy, we know more about him than, Lyra -- we know what his likes and hobbies are, and from his interaction with Lyra, we know that he is a bit of a tease.

Although not main, the old lady on the bus, she has had like 2 lines in 12 chapters, yet we know what she is thinking and that she is a awesome old lady!

The problem with Lyra could be solved if we get a chapter from Tristan's perspective; this way, you could both tell the readers about Tristan's daily routine and what he thinks of Lyra.

Storyline: 3/5

Like I mentioned earlier, the story line is plain.

Just some girl who follows her daily life, and who is in love with a stranger. One day the stranger and she meet...

Yeah, the way Tristan met her at first was kinda unexpected, and it's still a mystery how he knew where she went to school.

But finding these normal books on Wattpad is not normal so I give you props for that.

Description: 4/5

The description is kinda too much in the first few chapters.

You described Tristan two times. And the way he sounds kinda makes the reader think that he is a bad boy and not someone interested in arts.

There is example from the anime called, Monthly girls Nozaki-kun, in that the main lead is a manga artist but the main girl thinks that he is a bad boy because once he came with patches on his body while in reality he was hiding pen marks.

You can try this type of thing with Tristan; one, it would give some humour and tell us that, yes, he likes to draw.

The way you described the whole time schedule is okay. Just, at some places, it seemed a lot, but it's fine.

The portrayal of stuff was awesome. When she got off the bus and everyone was looking at her, it makes us feel the stares from people.

Writing Style: 3/5

Your chapters are short. Yes, you mentioned that they would be short, but in 12 chapters ,we still know nothing about the cast. We have only moved one step further into the story.

And the first 1-2 chapters have quite a few mistakes in tenses so, please check them.

OVERALL SCORE: 13/20

Overall, even with a simple plot, the story has charm as the side characters are quite likable.