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Review by Elysia: Rogue in Paris

Title: Rogue in Paris

Author: SydPanda5

Reviewer: ScarredHeroes

Description + Book Cover: 4/5

The book cover is absolutely stunning to the eye! I loved the mysterious yet aloof vibe it gave me. I would deem this to be a very good cover to bring forward a lot of views.

But don't be hesitant to make more as your story progresses, because at one point of time, you won't really be satisfied with it.

After being shot in the arm from her last mission, Agent Harper Medley and her best friend Amber Talle fly to Paris on a mission to find two missing agents, one of which saved Harper's life, and the other possibly rogue. In hopes of paying back a life debt and earning back her pride, Harper thinks this mission is the perfect way to prove that she's not as useless as she thinks... but when more agents go missing, the world's most deadly assassin leader Camille Aguste's kill-target revealed, and one handsome Frenchmen walks into the picture, Harper begins to think that this mission is more than she bargained for.

1) There's a lot happening here.

Descriptions are just a short introduction to what the readers are going to expect when they decided to read the book.

It should be clear, crisp and eloquently written.

For example, the description of Die Hard

New York City policeman John McClane is visiting his estranged wife and two daughters on Christmas Eve. He joins her at a holiday party in the headquarters of the Japanese-owned business she works for. But the festivities are interrupted by a group of terrorists who take over the exclusive high-rise, and everyone in it. Very soon McClane realizes that there's no one to save the hostages -- but him.

Here, the plot is clear: John McClane has a mission in his hand, and he's the only one that can save the hostages from the terrorists.

There's a reason, there is requirement and there is the action that this description.

I'm not saying that yours has to be the same, the key points to be taken here is that:

a) Your bring your main character.

b) You give her a challenge

c) Just give minute information on the obstacle she might/ will face.

c) Just give minute information on the obstacle she might/ will face.

You have given all of these, but you've also given to much of information that prevents people from taking in all the important stuff.

Let me give a preview of a rewritten version, just from my point of view:

Agent Medley and her best friend, Agent Talle, fly to Paris on a mission to find two missing agents, one of which saved Harper's life and the other possibly rogue.

In hopes of fulfilling payback a life debt and winning back her lost pride, Agent Medley finds this mission to be the golden opportunity to prove her abilities.

But with more agents going missing, the news of the kill-target of the world's most deadly leader of an assassin group, Agent Medley begins to realise that this mission is more than what she bargained for.

Added to this chaos is one handsome Frenchman entering into the picture, loving her being his only intention.

I feel like you just need to write your description on a piece of paper and read it aloud, slowly and then fast. I think you'll be able to notice a couple of 'extra' information that you edit out.