Title: The Line Between Light and Darkness
Author: AJNorvell
Reviewer: Oya_Onigiri
Summary: 3/5
The summary is good but there are a few lines that don't make sense.
'And my mother is a goddess, who is pure with evil'
Is your mother evil or does she fight evil?
'This world isn't what I was led to believe and well neither I am'
Her powers were not supposed to be believed -- well, actually, her existence. You can better put it as—
'This world isn't something I was led to believe and, well, neither was my existence/neither was the existence of my powers.'
Character Building: 5/5
As there are only four chapters, I cannot say much about the characters and their development, but from all I have read, you have portrayed the protagonist's feelings properly.
Skylar and her mother also have their emotions and feelings explained greatly.
Writing Style: 4/5
Your writing style is great, but a few things lack here and there. Like the water incident was only witnessed by one boy, Thomas, but you wrote 'the memory of boys'.
Plot + Originality: 2/5
The plot in itself isn't really unique. The girl obtaining certain magical powers because of the relation of Gods and evil spirits with her mom and dad.
Of course, you restrained her powers by giving her water and that she could move objects by her mind; those two, if used properly, could still be very overpowering.
However, how Alisha reacts about this situation and about how she already knew about the fact that she had powers is really good.
OVERALL SCORE: 14/20
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