Title: My Thoughts that Flow
Author: startinganewjourney
Reviewer: ScarredHeroes
Description + Book Cover: 4/5
I love your book cover! The aesthetic sense soothes me and is extremely visually pleasing. I don't think I would change the cover, but if your poems are leaning onto a particular emotion then I suggest you switch it up.
Generally when we talk about descriptions, I would suggest you make it more 'poetic', something more dramatic. Your current description is good, but in order to hitch the readers interest, I suggest you involve a very touching set of lines. I feel like you can easily do that considering your writing is great.
Writing Style: 3.5/5
As of poetry, there is no particular 'personal' style poets have, especially when the poems are linked to personal emotions. But there are many ways, you phrase your words to make the description of every emotion unique.
I love the way you use capital letters at places where you want to highlight your choice of words. Especially the poem 'Hope' kept me thinking about the topic itself, which is excellent.
In order to improve, just like every other poet, expanding your vocabulary is a must. Try using shorter, but more complex words. Use more exclamation marks and try avoiding the words 'it' 'the' 'and' often as it tends to ruin the flow of the poems.
I would also suggest you use more abstract ideas and connect them to your emotions. Try subjecting a non living object to an emotion you feel- in other words, metaphors. They are efficient and allow people to find more than one meaning behind the words of your poem.
Punctuation + Grammar: 4/5
Your punctuation usage is on point, although I would suggest toning down the use of commas. I know how hard it is to not use commas, considering they are highly prone to prevent any form of disruption. Yet, sometimes using too much of any punctuation mark will make your poems monotone.
As of grammar, I would highly suggest you to expand your range of vocabulary- rephrasing with more unique and complicated ones, just like I had elicited in the previous paragraph.
Aesthetic Sense + Mood Setting: 3.5/5
You've done a formidable job in allowing me to see various emotions through your perspective.
In some poems, I was unable to comprehend the message conveyed to the zenith and I think it's because of the similar styles followed in every other poem and the range of vocabulary.
But, despite everything, I loved your book of poems. I can see your passion towards it and I hope you can continue to write beautiful poems.
OVERALL SCORE: 15/20
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