Title: Forever June
Author: eternitea40
Reviewer: ScarredHeroes
Description + Book Cover: 5/5
The book cover is something i never expected it to be! So beautiful! The clarity and the effort you've put into it shows how much interest you have in your book!
As for your description, I have to say, it's perfect! I have nothing to correct in this arena.
Punctuation + Grammar: 5/5
There is nothing really in particular that stood out to me as 'errors'. You are impeccable in your writing and often make sure that you don't miss a comma or two.
I would suggest you use the semi-colon, in case commas are your major punctuation mark.
As of grammar, I think what you're utilising to articulate is immaculate. You can keep it up, in addition if it suits your writing style I would suggest you use more metaphors and visual style writing to intensify the emotions trying to be conveyed.
Writing Style: 4.5/5
Your writing style is extremely brilliant, I love the way you've aptly used you ingenuity and grammar to narrate a cohesive yet brilliant set of poems describing the heartbreaking journey of June.
You've definitely found your style of writing. You're also pretty thorough in your intentions and thats something which is very hard to do.
But, I would suggest you switch up your writing styles in phases and challenge yourself in writing verses in a variety of poetic forms.
Aesthetic Sense + Mood Setting: 4.5/5
The story you convey is grim, gloomy and depressing which then will take a turn into inspirational, renewing hope and finding your way.
The first few poems, I would suggest you make some of your lines in bold to emphasise June's grief as he explains her death.
As an afterthought of reading your poems, It would've been great if we could see more of June's inner storm and pain rather than he explain her death, then delving into his feelings.
I'm not saying this as a con, but merely as a reader who literally submerges into a book, completely going inside the words and it's emotions.
Generally, people write poems as a form to vent their emotions. This is the first time I've read a story form of poetry and has throughly inspired and evoked a lot of emotions in me.
I hope you continue writing poetry!
OVERALL SCORE: 19/20
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