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Review by Kirsty: Two Truths and a Liar

Title: Two Truths and a Liar

Author: moiigge_mo

Reviewer: CursedHobbit

Summary: 5/5

I absolutely LOVE your blurb. It is creative, witty, and gives hints at the plot without giving too much away. Using the creative fonts really helped convey the message as well.

Grammar: 5/5

I didn't find any obvious issues with your grammar or spelling, other than slang which was intentional for the character development. I can tell you took a lot of time polishing.

Character Building: 5/5

I felt that from your summary all the way through your story I could tell each individual MC apart and could identify the unique qualities you gave to them to differentiate the points of view.

Although you switched between multiple POVs of very different characters, I don't think you lost their individual essence when doing so. I could tell each character had their own individual background, challenges, and personalities and they all worked together in the story very well.

Writing Style: 4/5

The descriptive vocabulary you used was beautiful. You really named the texture, color, temperature, and feeling of your story. Although I appreciated the lovely imagery, I did notice that some sentences seemed to stretch on and on. Be careful when describing something in so many words. For example: Chapter 1 - "All I knew was that there was something in me, growing, something so cold and deep that it consumed all else, spinning, stretching, tightening its grip around my frantic heart and when it melted running down my spine with an icy shiver." (42 words total). This sentence could be broken up many ways to make reading the sentence less burdensome.

The way in which you paragraphed the chapters was flawless. You separated the important sentences from the rest, which really provided the emphasis you were looking for.

You had excellent cliffhangers at the end of each chapter, drawing the reader in.

The multiple POV style can sometimes be very difficult to master and many writers have trouble making it work. However, I can definitely say that without a doubt, your story shined through the three POV's you wrote from. It is also very admirable that you kept your chapters in the same POV sequence. It can pose a challenge to writers to stay on par with the plot when switching between chapters.

Your use of idioms, similes, and metaphors was fantastic. I truly found your writing style enjoyable.

Plot + Originality: 5/5

I love this unique plot and I really think you have maximized your use of each individual chapter. I love that you used such diverse characters to tell this story. This genre is right up my alley.

OVERALL SCORE: 24/25

It was an honor to review your story. Your writing is impressive, and your story is unique. I truly appreciated the obvious hard work you spent on making your story come to life. I will definitely be adding this book to my reading list because I am interested to find out where you decide to take your story!

I had very little insight to provide on improvement strategies for your story. I sincerely believe that the reads you are looking for will come with time and your continued effort. I can practically guarantee that if your story was entered into any Wattpad contests, you would take one of the top placements. I hope that you don't give up on this story; I think you have a real gem!