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Review by Bella: Tainted

Title: Tainted

Author: ThatBiryaniWaliLadki

Reviewer: SilasNevrin

Cover: 2/5

You've covered the basics: title, picture, extras. That's the only positive I have for this cover.

You use two different fonts with completely opposite colours and styles, your title blends into the background so I'm led to believe that your title is actually your extras, written smack bang in the middle of your cover in bright white.

White brings text forward, black pushes it away when you're using a dark picture like you have. And don't even get me started on that picture...seriously?

This picture gives you no space to utilise for your writing—so scrap it.

Find a picture with empty space so it's easier to lay out your title and extras. I don't see how the font for the title you've used is relevant as we're reading about a girl in high school, not a zombie bride.

Change your extras font to something clean and small, change your title to something bigger and bolder so people actually read it first, and find a picture that grips your audience.

Title: 3/5

It's okay. It peaks interest for about 10 seconds. But it gives off the wrong vibe. When I hear the word tainted, I don't think struggling girl in high-school.

If you're set on keeping this title, then make sure in the summary that you maybe use the word to reinforce the fact of it, and to make sure readers know what they're reading about.

Summary: 2/5

I'm sorry, I don't like it.

I'm just going to go through it piece by piece so it's clear about what's okay about it, and what is definitely not okay.

Anjali Menon is the definition of your usual overachiever.

Nothing wrong here, we can move on.

Editing the school magazine, being the topper girl and the beautiful dancing diva. 

Houston, we have a problem.

Okay cool, she edits the school magazine. Topper girl? I assume that means she gets good grades, otherwise I'd have no idea what topper girl means. Try changing it to 'she topped every class or got the best grades etc'.

And beautiful dancing diva.

Hm. Sure your character can be beautiful, she's a dancer fine, but diva is the word I have a problem with. If your character is the victim of constant bullies, mind you, I'd not expect her to be labelled a diva—unless that's what all dancers are called ...like a group name.

With skills as these, one would expect her to rule not just the school but everybody's hearts.

Being an editor of the paper and a dancer isn't really a skill. Doing it well is a skill. So just be clear on that.

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No, please don't do this (the periods as line breaks).