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Yes, Mr. Stranger?

Author : Anushkieeee

Reviewer : luvrtaekook

Yes, Mr. Stranger?

Cover: 6/10

The cover is neat and attractive because of the fonts that you used, I like how it glowed, it is attractive. Although the quality of the picture is a bit blurry, I suggest you find a picture of good quality.

Title: 5/5

I like the title a lot, it gives the soft vibe of the story. I find it cute and unique. It is very inviting especially if you like reading soft stories.

Synopsis: 8/10

The synopsis matches with the title and the plot. It gives excitement because of the cliffhanger that you used; it will excite readers to read your story.

Plot: 21/30

I understand that your story must match with the title, but I find it too rushed. After a couple of hours, they made love already. Maybe attraction can come first but making love is a different corner. They don’t know each other that much yet so I think they should do that first before doing a huge step. Although your plot is unique, you should take note of the pace. I deducted some points for the excitement as well, your story lacks the thrill that most readers are looking for. A story must contain a conflict and solution to give excitement, you can add that too.

Characters: 6/10

I didn’t understand their personalities well because the story went up too fast. I would like to know more about their personalities. They were realistic (I know such things might happen in real life) but maybe you can add more than the plot and characters that you have now. For the emotions, I suggest you highlight them more.

Grammar: 23/25

Your grammar is pretty good. The punctuations are well placed, and the tenses were clear.

Writing style: 8/10

The dialogues were clear and understandable. The choice of words is well too, your writing style is really good.

Overall

Your story has potential although it missed some marks, I would recommend this to those who are interested in short stories. You can use my suggestions in improving your work. Good luck with your writing career!                         

Review Scores: 77/100

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