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My heart that cried out

Author: Koyle_Mercury

Reviewer: haefatima99

My heart that cried out

Cover: 5/10

You definitely need to change your cover since as a reader, I didn't find it attracting at all. We have been advised since ages ago that never judge a book by its cover, but the truth is that we always judge a book by its cover.

Pay special attention towards the fonts, because I could only understand half of the title, and the rest was pretty unfussy for me. Plus, the font used was pretty flat. Your work was a lyric book, so we definitely need more aesthetic sense in your cover.

Title: 3/5

I don't have any qualms with your title, but I believe it could be more poetic. These were you feelings, dear. So you definitely need to become a magnet to the aesthetic words.

Quick Tip: Change your book's title into a word that perfectly describes your personality, plus, the themes of the poems in your lyric collection.

Synopsis: 1/10

I know, I went too harsh here, but your synopsis was like someone gave me a book to read with no excitement, and that excitement was the synopsis that you were missing out here.

I would suggest you to add few quotes or lines from your lyric collection in the description. Also, after adding those lines, you can add some information about your book like on which topics you are going to write.

Plot: 21/30

I critique this criteria on the basis of the themes of your poems. Those themes were a very melodic depiction of the each plot that you sketched for every poem.

I loved how you conveyed your themes in the poems. You added a lot of unique perspective and meaning to various topics. The lyric that hit me so hard was "Remember", and I was abled to relate to it.

Since there are only three lyrics so I can't say much about your overall job, but I am impressed. Good work!

Characters: 8/10

Since it was an anthology so it was hard to predict the characters. Talking about your book, after observing your book several time, I found only one character. This character was YOU.

You were the main character of your lyric book, and telling us how you feel. You were the one who was holding many people like you inside your lyrics. So I am very impressed.

Grammar: 20/25

Your grammar was better than many books I have read on Wattpad. But, I saw you were missing out Enjambments.

• Enjambment means to step over. In poetry, it can be defined as a thought or sense, phrase or clause, in a line of poetry that does not come to an end at the line break, but moves over to the next line.

Notice the following lines from your book:

[ Have you ever looked behind,
At our past, how far we have come? ]

Edited version:

[Have you ever looked behind
At our past, how far we have came?]

•Missing pronunciation

There were few stanzas where you were missing punctuation completely. Notice the following lines.

Unedited version:

[Would you believe if I told you
The murderer is a brother of mine Caught in the scandal of murdering
The girl we knew as 'Drew ]

Edited version:

[ Would you believe if I told you
The murderer is a brother of mine?
Caught in the scandal of murdering
The girl we knew as 'Drew.' ]

Writing style: 7/10

In this criteria, you were missing out literary devices. Literary devices means metaphors, symbolism, similes, assonance, etc. You need to work on your description, because your book was a lyric book.

Also, edit your book so that the messy spacing between the paragraph is cleaned.

Overall:

I loved your book. I loved how you made me relate to your work so much. Your emotion building was very apt. But, you definitely need to research on the language and technicalities of poetry.

Review Scores: 65/100

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