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Marked For Vengeance

Writer :: _Knishka_

Reviewer :: gukkeun

Marked For Vengeance

Cover :: 3/10

In terms of attraction, yes it's doing its job well. But in terms of quality? I'm sorry, that's as much as my scoring would allow you. The blending of the characters should've been done better, Namjoon is barely present. The quote beneath the title isn't visible at all, including your nickname and those tiny words at the very top. Don't use such thin fonts, use bolder ones, please. The "Vengeance" should be a different color tone, it blends in with the background and it became increasingly difficult to see.

Title :: 5/5

It definitely suits the idea you're going for. It had me curious about the meaning behind it, and I immediately understood the reason behind the given name. Honestly, I couldn't think of a better name. Incredible job in picking it out.

Synopsis :: 8.5/10

I have to say, I'm really impressed. Your description did a great job in seducing me to read the story. It contains a good amount of mystery; seemingly confusing at first glance until you slowly start to understand what's going on at the very last statement, then it finally clicked. The story is mystery based and what you have there is literally the genre your books held. It's perfect, especially after taking in the fact that the boys are as well known as they are currently instead of being the usual bland characters that held completely different jobs and personalities, would've been a huge turn off. It had me digging to know how much their reputation would be affected if the public found out or in case the murderer was finally spotted.

Now, the contents you wrote are good, even if the description is mostly filled with dialogues. I'll have to say this, don't use all capital letters while describing someone screaming. It hurts the reader's eyes, it genuinely does. Remove the capital letters and replace them with an exclamation mark instead. In terms of grammar, it'll be way better. At least the readers wouldn't have to see all capital screaming when they first see the description. Keep in mind that ellipses have three dots, and not four.

Plot :: 10/30

The plot itself wasn't bad, but the development and the presentation weren't giving it any credit. Everything was rushed from the very start. One minute, they were all crowding over the dead body, and the next thing you know, the police arrived out of nowhere. And they were asked the reason behind the murder with absolutely no proof it was their doings whatsoever. I'm surprised the public isn't made known of this, finding a dead body in their house would bound to create a stir. Either talk more about the consequences of the accident or describe the chaotic scene better; how it affects their career, keep in mind that BTS isn't a small group.

In the fourth chapter, the introduction of the characters was a mess. Don't shove everything into one single chapter, I couldn't remember any of them and I doubt the readers could as well. Take it slow, there's no rush. The story is incredibly fast paced and the character introductions are very hasty. The long descriptions about each individual don't make things any better, now it looks fast paced and lengthy. Find a way to get the readers to acknowledge the important people, lift their interests instead of bombarding them with a tray of bland information with nothing but the chapter to help guide them through the whole story.

When the unknown caller first appeared, Taehyung seemed incredibly relaxed, too relaxed. His reaction was of annoyance instead of frightened, shouldn't he have sensed that something was off? He could've identified the caller as a stalker and or a crazy fan instead of thinking it was all a prank. Work on the basis of being realistic and understand your character's point of view before rushing to end the scene and moving on to the next.