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Trench | A poetry collection

Author: sumi_rra

Reviewer: haefatima99

Trench

Cover: 7/10

The cover is giving me insight into both the title and story. It has warlike elements in it that could bewitch anyone in a single glance. But I have an objection to this cover as well. The font you used is definitely not matching to your title. It's giving me fluffy and cute vibes. Try to use a font that is depicting warlike elements in your story. Also, the size of your font is too small for my eyes. Try to increase this size because your first impression is the last impression.

A quick tip: Go to "www.dafont.com" and there you will find amazing fonts. I don't want to see this book getting less views and love just because of a font. Also, Your cover will be a masterpiece if you are adding a quote from your book. Trust me, your readers aren't going to leave your book unless they read it if there is a quote on it. 

Title: 5/5

The title fits the poetry collection incredibly well. What I see is what I get! Great! This is a true example of perfection as each and every word in your book is screaming in support of this perfection. This title is eye-catching and communicates the warlike themes that you include in your poetry collection.

Synopsis: 9/10

I have read many poetry books on Wattpad and reviewed them. I swear to God I didn't find anything like your blurb. Your synopsis is covering everything that a good blurb of poetry collection screams for. You mentioned the genre of your book, and you wrote a short summary of your poetry collection too. Nothing can be appreciable than this. I am satisfied and overwhelmed, Sumi. Thanks for writing your synopsis aesthetically and attractively.

A quick tip: Your synopsis needs no improvement but if you would like to add something to this then add few lines of a poem from your book in it. Just my tip. You don't have to do it if you don't like it.

Themes or Subjects: 4/5

The poem is talking about horrors in trenches and how WW1 caused great destruction inside a young soldier's mind who was away from his family. Sometimes he is an iceberg. Sometimes he is mud. He becomes burdened sky in a place and a discarded limb in another spot. He is an infection, detection, lice, and a rat. Whatever he is. He is still a brother or a son of a family. The theme of War and soldier's struggles on the battlefield are described very well.

Technicalities: 9/10

As an editor, you definitely have a knowledgeable brain about grammar and punctuation. I found no basic issue in the technical field. I will ask you to edit this book one more time because there is always room for improvement.

Structure/form : 5/5

The structure of your poetry collection falls under "Free verse" and truly we don't need rhymes and perfect use of Meter or rhyme scheme when we are writing a poetry book. You chose free verse as your form, and I really loved your open-mindedness. You can improve a lot in the matter of structures of poems if you research about them because you are a faster learner.

Writing style: 9/10

About the writing style, so your description is very rich in words. Like the use of words is just parallel to the genre of your book. I loved the way you used metaphors. It's not easy to use literary devices in your poetry unless you have clear knowledge about them and I can see that your mind is very well aware of the basics. The one thing that I found missing was your aesthetics. I am not saying to be an artist in using aesthetics, but your book is something that really needs them. I am sure if you are adding them then this book will come out as a masterpiece. 

I loved this poem a lot:

[ "I was Veneer Tark,

My mother's son, my sister's brother,

The thought sends a vibration through me; laughter,

Maniacal and booming, just like the battlefield that night."

- V. T ]

Even if he is a soldier but in the end, he is a son or brother of someone. These lines got me into tears for some reason.

Personal Enjoyment: 5/5

You can clearly understand that what's the level of my enjoyment after reading this book. Poetry is something that I would die for. The fact that you didn't write something romantic and went for a warlike theme that is needed the most in this world is very overwhelming. No teen likes to write about wars, but your interest and level of observation are exceptional. This is your second book that I reviewed and I have four words for you: "You are just amazing." Keep going, Sumi. Good luck!

Total: 53/60

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