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Children Of Tragedy

Author: youngwriter1235

Reviewer: yoonchim_Z

CHILDREN OF TRAGEDY

Cover: 2/10

The title should have gone with a bolder font. I couldn't see the word 'Children' clearly, as well as your own username. Plus, this is an Ateez based book, but I don't see any member in the cover, you should at least put Seonghwa in there so that readers know which group they're reading about. I don't see how the cover is related to the story in any way, please fix it. Readers are very picky when it comes to covers.

Title: 8/10

It's alluring, it doesn't pull me in immediately however. But no other title could possibly be more suitable for your story, it's perfect.

Synopsis: 2/10

Too short. It doesn't attract readers at all with the little info you gave, add some plot and a few dialogues from the story that would pick at the reader's curiosity. If you are going to keep it that way, don't fit it all into one paragraph, make it two sentences and choose aesthetic fonts to go with it.

Plot: 23/30

So far, the story has been going smoothly, it isn't rushed and it's good that you take things slow. I wouldn't say that it's completely original, I've seen many stories of princesses being forced to marry a villager and falling in love afterwards. But I can tell there'll be more secrets and mysteries coming in later chapters. I'll draw a line somewhere in between exciting and simple.

Character: 7/10

At first it seems like Annabelle is fond of Seonghwa, from all their interactions and hearts beating and whatnot. So it's surprising and confusing when I found out that she isn't interested in him at all. Also, there isn't a need to put too much details into telling each and every story of how the guards got into the palace, it'll seem like you're trying to drag the story to make it longer, keep the flow slow and simple.

Grammar: 18/20
I do find a few mistakes here and there. Most of them consists of misspelled words, but everything else is alright.

Writing Style: 7/10

The way you describe some scenes are absolutely incredible. But don't drag it out too much, leave out the unimportant details (ex: the soft, blue blanket his mother had knitted for him on his 14th birthday), it's too long, and the birthday part isn't necessary at all. Your grammar is great, but people get tired of reading useless information (who needs to know about Seonghwa cleaning the porcelain sink?). Please please please keep it simple.

Overall:

I genuinely liked it. But follow my advice of reducing the non important details, you can add them in from time to time, but too much information will make the whole thing lengthy and dragged. Fix your cover as well, it should be related to the story to pull in more Atiny's. I'm an Atiny, and I would have been more attracted if I saw Seonghwa on the cover. Edit and look through your works to fix those misspelled words. But so far, I love how smooth the storyline is, good job.

Review Scores : 67/100

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