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A Queen's Pawn

Author: WishmaHafeez6

Reviewer: sprite_and_hamburger

A Queen's Pawn

Cover:- 4/10

Please change your cover, that's all I wanna say because you have a great story with you but the cover is ruining it. The cover is good but it's not going with the story well. The font style is not matching and the color scheme is not great either. Why's there fire behind her? Is this even necessary? In my opinion, you should definitely change your cover because your cover isn't matching your book. Nothing is matching your story except the girl holding the sword.

Title:- 5/5

After reading the book I can say the title is good for the book. It is relevant to the plot and it is attractive as well. 'A Queen's Pawn', the title is royal and gives an idea about the story. I don't think anything can be suitable other than this.  Good job :)

Synopsis:- 9/10

I wanted to say 'wow such an interesting synopsis' because after reading it I was so eager to read the book but your blurb is revealing a lot about your plot. Anyone who reads it can easily guess what's gonna be the story. I am not saying it's a bad thing but sometimes people don't read a book if they find it predictable.

Plot:- 30/30

The story starts with Aelin who was running in the dark forest, she was exhausted and cold but still, she was running and running. In the first two-three paragraphs we can easily guess that she is cold, she has no energy, etc. You wrote it the same thing in 5-6 paragraphs repeating the same thing again and again. If I am being honest, the first chapter is quite boring because there is nothing other than the fact that she was exhausted, the end of the first is a bit interesting.
The plot as a whole is very intriguing (I personally like the fantasy genre). The story is running around Aelin and how she was following the bargaining deal. The way you narrated the story is amazing, I can imagine each scene. Action scenes are so hard to display in words but you did a great job *chef kiss* I love it. The scene where she was chained, how she escaped and Lucian strangle her to death all scenes are perfectly in sync. The narration of each character is perfect, I don't think you need to change anything in your book. Your book is underrated!

Character:- 10/10

The narration of the characters and personality portray was good. Aelin's character is my favorite! She was following the queen's orders but still, she was showing her own personality. The conversation between Elliot and Aelin can show her personality. Other characters in the story also have their personality. You made sure that every character has their screen time which is the quality of a good author. You are doing great, keep it up.

Grammar:- 24/25

Your Grammar is very good. Trust me, I tried so hard but couldn't find the mistakes. All I found is tiny tiny punctuation and capitalization mistakes, other than that everything was perfect!
A quick tip: please pay attention to verbal tags and action tags. When a quotation is followed by a verbal then always put a comma in the quotation ends. You can search on Google for more information.

Writing Style:- 9/10

The vocabulary of the story is good, the word choice is good as well. The tone of the story was good but in some places, it felt like you are telling rather than showing. I mean to say, it was more like someone dictating a story rather than living the storyline. It feels good when we connect ourselves to the story and live the story, I don't know if it makes sense lol.

Overall:
Well, after reading the book I can say you are knowledgeable so I don't think you need any advice or anything but I just wanna suggest one thing, if you are introducing a new character in the story then you can write brief info about the character at the end of the chapter. You know like an author's note, this way people will know what's the character role and name. I said it already but I wanted to say again, change your cover, the cover isn't showing your true talent.

TOTAL :: 91/100

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