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A Normal Story

Author :: yeji-is_pretty-

Reviewer :: haefatima99

Title :: A normal story

Cover :: 6/10

The cover of your book wasn't giving any justice to your story. The background image of Taehyung was only making it look better, otherwise, the font style was too vague for my eyes.  Anybody, who reads your book for the first time won't be able to read the title on the cover.  As for the author's name, it was vague too. Make the title and author name visible to your audience because we judge a book by its cover. No matter what.

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Title :: 3/5

Okay, so the title was something that matched your book but it doesn't mean it was normal to use such kind of title. Some readers might take that "Normal" word as normal as they will never click the "read button" but other than that it was actually a normal story of two people falling in love. But it could be a lot better based on your plot.

A quick tip: If you wanna change then replace that "Normal" word with something more interesting.

Synopsis :: 7/10

Your synopsis was giving the readers enough inside of the story and had a mystery in it that could push a reader to read it. But there were problems with grammar and punctuation. Remember, that commas aren't necessary everywhere. Also, it would be better if you add some more information about the two main leads since you only introduced the main conflict of your plot.

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Plot :: 27/30

The storyline was interesting but we don't only look at that. Your book is lacking in the development of scenes which is a very important element of our plot. Scenes in which Taehyung and his main lead are talking need more development as your readers want to get giggles in their stomachs. So make those scenes more developed and romantic. Your genre is a contemporary romance and this genre needs a lot of development. I was happy that you didn't end this story at a wedding, rather, you wrote an alternative happy ending that is quite realistic. Not every couple marries as quickly as the main conflicts between them are resolved.  

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Characters :: 6/10

I am not saying that your characters weren't interesting but they lack excitement, empathy, sympathy, and familiarity. When you talk about Taehyung being in love with the main lead then tell us his expressions, feelings, and thoughts in a way that seems very realistic. What Taehyung was wearing when he was leaving for the airport at the end of the story? These kinds of stuff seem useless but it helps your readers understand the style of your character. Use both direct and indirect characterization to built your characters since they are people who build your whole story.

A quick tip:

Notice the words below:
Direct characterization: Tell us directly through your perspective about your characters. You can take help of the words of another character too. In short, describe them through words.

Indirect characterization: Do you know that the characters' way of speaking tells us about their personalities? In short, use their attitude as equipment to develop them.

Grammar: 18/25

Your book definitely needs editing because your paragraphs are very messy. You are misusing punctuations and sometimes tenses are switching from past to present. These are very common mistakes that I can find in any new book so you can fix them easily.

- First, fix your verbal tags, and action tags since you can correct them on your own.

What are verbal tags? Anything like, "she said" and we will put a comma (,) before closing quotation marks.  Notice the following example from your book:

[" Trust me honey, mothers are always right" she chirped placing some leftovers in the oven.]

You are missing the comma before closing the quotation. Also, you have problems with spacing a lot so the edited version of it is following:

["Trust me, honey. Mothers are always right," she said placing some leftovers in the oven.]

If your dialogue is followed by the action then we will place a period (.). For example, in the same example if we put "chirped" in place of "said" then we have the following result:

["Trust me honey, mothers are always right." she chirped placing some leftovers in the oven.]

Writing style: 7/10

Talking about writing style, it needs improvement too.

• You are barely describing places, characters, and scenes. You need to work on the description like don't just tell your reader how a character is laughing or crying. Show them how tears escape from their eyes and fall in the heart of someone who always smiles.

• Don't use scripted style. Sometimes, you used dialogues after dialogues without verbal or action tags. It makes your story looks like a play or drama and there is a lot of difference between a drama and a novel so be careful with it.

• You want to tell your readers that your character is screaming? Please don't do this if you are telling us that your character is screaming:

["HELLO AND WHATS YOUR PROBLEM "I spat.]

Writing in capital writers can hurt your reader's eyes so avoid that.

• Don't use an informal word in writing that is supposed to be formal. For example:

["AAABSJDHDNEJ" I stomped my feet on the ground and hurried down the stairs again. I'm gonna kill the person whoever called at this time. My mood had been ruined enough.]

These words are okay to use if you are writing a texting conversation.

Overall ::
Overall, work on the editing of this book because your grammatical errors might get in the way of the love and support you deserve. As a reader, I enjoyed your book but you need more work to make it an improved version of the present one.

Total :: 74/100

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