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Complex

Writer :: hay_bangtan

Reviewer ::Taebaetae74

Title :: Complex

Cover :: 3/5

Visually, your book’s cover is appealing enough. But since this book revolves around Min Yoongi and Jeon Jungkook, I feel that you could have added them to the cover and made it more related to the book. Putting this aside, the cover looks just fine.

Title :: 8/10

Loved it. While this title might not be something new, it’s related to this book. The fact that you did incorporate the story’s theme into the title is something that has to be appreciated.

Synopsis :: 6/10

It was good, but not entrancing enough. You did provide a synopsis but it was too bland in my opinion. Warnings regarding the book’s contents should not be a part of the book’s synopsis. A synopsis should only contain a rough run-through across the book which is simple, entrancing, and fairly short all at the same time. Warnings could go into a disclaimer chapter at the beginning of the book. Excluding all the extras in the book’s description, it only had one paragraph which was not really curiosity-raising.

Plot: 26/30

Honestly, I loved it. The way all the backstories of respective characters made perfect sense (making me look like a clueless idiot) was very interesting. I loved the way you end chapters too. There were certain plot holes I did notice though, which is why I reduced 2 scores. For instance, in the scene where Jungkook and Hoseok exchange videos and in the next few chapters, they are seen exchanging numbers. That does not make sense considering the fact that they exchanged videos previously. If you could avoid careless mistakes as such, the plot would be better.

Characters :: 8/10

The characters as a whole had pretty distinct personalities. Their development throughout the story is very evident too, you could’ve made it a tad bit more gradual in my opinion. I’m not saying that it was rushed, of course, what I’m trying to tell you is that you should’ve detailed some points so that characters would stay distinct and in a different spotlight in the story.

Grammar :: 11/25

You really could’ve done a better job here. You have to pay more attention to the tenses you use. If you decide to write in the past tense, you might as well stick to it. Of course, changing tenses here and there isn’t ‘wrong’ but it is really confusing for readers and it reduces the quality of a write-up. Next, you use unnecessary words in sentences (especially words like ‘basically’, etc.) It would be more refreshing to read chapters with proper sentence constructions. I also noticed that you use the word ‘and a lot just in one paragraph. There were missing punctuation marks like commas, too. Of course, these may seem like small errors to you, but punctuations influence the way in which readers interpret your ideas. For instance, the right version of “Oh fuck it” is “Oh, fuck it,” here, you need to put a comma before the ending quote and after ‘oh’ too.

Writing Style :: 6/10

First, I would like to talk about the POVs you use. Being a writer myself, I would never recommend changing POVs so many times. Of course, this isn’t ‘wrong’, but it just ruins the flow of the story. Like I already mentioned above, you need a lot of practice with the construction of your sentences. The first sentence of this book itself does not make any sense. “I exhaled loud enough to reach where I am certain my mother is stood at the bottom of the stairs as she yells up at me.” Don’t you think this sentence makes little to no sense at all? The line is too lagged and this continues throughout your book. Too many lagged and long paragraphs which are extremely confusing to interpret. Then, of course, all the errors I mentioned above counts as a part of your writing style too.

Overall ::
To be frank, I would not continue reading your book. It has an interesting plot of course, but the way it was delivered was very confusing. You can just edit these errors out and take your own time. I wish you good luck and don’t hesitate to hit me up if you need any help regarding your works ;) Don’t be demotivated or offended, please. I am trying to help you ☺

Total :: 68/100

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