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Fateful

Author: November__Bae

Reviewer: haefatima99

Fateful

Cover: 6/10

The image that you have used is very simple yet so relatable to your plot. The visuals of Taehyung is making your cover look attractive. This is exactly how he looks like when we meet him for the first time. But the font you used is way too small for the title. It would be better if you order from a cover shop for a more detailed cover. Your cover is the first impression and if this impression isn't good enough then readers might not read your book too. So you need to be more aesthetic in the matter of your book's cover.

Title: 4/5

The title could not have been something else as it's perfectly suitable for your story. It is the fate that brings both our main leads closer to each other. It is their fate that takes them away from each other giving them memories to hold onto. Good job in this area. This title sounds poetic and with the picture of Taehyung on your cover, it makes it more poetic.

Synopsis: 5/10

Your synopsis is very short and simple. A synopsis shouldn't be telling the whole story but it should not be telling anything at all. I understand that you added two quotes from your book but they weren't enough. Add some more information and paragraphs from your book. Your readers need to click on
"read " button and it's only possible if you make your synopsis more interesting and wordy.

A quick tip: You can always understand how to write a synopsis by reading the synopsis of Wattpad paid stories.

Plot: 27/30

The plot was very realistic as we can literally see BTS suffering because of the obsession of their sasaeng fans. You really did a great job touching this topic. I guess you made it as a novella because it was pretty short. Sometimes, the scenes were flowing at a fast pace around chapter 4. After reading your book, even 3 people can follow the right path then the ranking of your plot is infinity. I fell in love with this story since it was based on reality.

Characters: 6/10

Your characters need more characterization, development, and improvement. Even if you intended to make it short but still your characters were unable to give me any empathy and sympathy. Apart from their development, I somehow related to the main female lead. Her personality was very similar to mine and she was telling me a story that I would like to hear for myself in the future. So I believe many people will find her character very interesting too. As for Taehyung, I loved his lost and innocent personality since it really suits him so well.

Grammar: 19/25

There was no major issue with grammar but sometimes you were using verbal tags and action tags wrongly. Verbal tags are words like, "she said" but action tags are words like, "she ran" so we need to follow their rules in writing the dialogue.

Verbal tag: Put a comma before the closing quotation mark. For example, notice the following example from your book:

["Why should I ? I don't even know you." he said retaliating.]

It should be:

["Why should I ? I don't even know you," he said retaliating.]

As for the action tag then you need to put a period (.) in place of a comma.

Also, I noticed that you are using so many periods in an ellipsis (...) Only three periods are enough.

Writing style: 5/10

• The description of your book is neither too simple nor too rich in words. This book was a contemporary romance so you needed to be descriptive with your words.

• Avoid using so many "said" and rephrase them for a better flow of description. Too many "said" just make your story unrealistic and artificial.

• Sometimes, you are using dialogues after dialogues without verbal or action tags. It makes your story looks like a play or drama and there is a lot of difference between a drama and a novel so be careful with it.

• You want to tell your readers that your character is screaming? Please don't do this if you are telling us that your character is screaming:

"OH MY GOD, IS THAT KIM TAEHYUNG FROM BTS ?"

Use your description to tell your reader that your character is high or angry as it's the rule of literature as well.

Overall,

I loved the storyline of your plotline as it was based on your reality. I loved the way you went with the moral of this story by the end of the book. The explanation was everything. Your words were very wise and I wish people could think like you too. I believe that after working on your verbal tags and action tags on your own. You can make this book a lot better. If you are interested in being more descriptive then go with using literary devices to write descriptions.

Total: 72/100

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