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WINTER BEAR

Author: -blanktae

Reviewer: ialwaystanbts

WINTER BEAR

Cover: (10/10)

I am in LOVE with this cover hearts It looks so stunning and cute { I could keep staring at it for hours}hearts
( Just a suggestion : I personally don't like the stickers on the cover because they don't look very pleasant. It is up to you if you wanna keep them or remove them.)

Title: (5/5)

Again I love the title hearts I can't think of a better one so good job on choosing it.

Synopsis: (10/10)

The synopsis really touched my heart. I don't know why but I think I shed a few tears while reading it (╥﹏╥). It is short but really interesting so it is a thumbs up from me.

Plot: (22/30)

This is where the things take a huge turn. The overall plot is good but there are many plot holes in it. It feels very unrealistic and rushed. Imagine yourself as Yeona and think about this: Would you really go to a stranger's house who stopped you from killing yourself and stay with him for a night?
I would not do that.
Since the story is not yet complete, some things don't make sense yet. So i'm gonna rate this a (22/30).

Characters: (6/10)

The personalities of the characters were um pretty okay. All I can say is I didn't feel much sympathy for Yeona. The emotions in the story weren't expressed well. (The synopsis made me more emotional than the actual story).

Grammar : (23/25)

Your grammar is pretty good. The punctuation and tenses were used properly. There were minor errors in the story which needed proof reading to be corrected. You did a good job on that!

Writing style: (8/10)

Your writing style is decent . I didn't have any confusion while reading the story. The one thing that I would like to point out is that it is a bit inconsistent. You use complex words but sometimes you just end it with simple words. Try to keep the vocabulary consistent.

Overall:

Good job! I love this story and see a lot of potential in it. The cover, synopsis and banner are just awesome. Just make sure to go through my advises and edit the simple mistakes in you book. Will definitely add it too my reading list and keep reading it. hearts

Review Scores = (84/100)

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