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A LITTLE LIFE

Author - fSnowFlake

Reviewer - kimvante_

A LITTLE LIFE

Cover - 8/10

I love the picture used for the cover but it looks too plain. I suggest you add in the book title as well as the author(your) name in a normal font with white colour.

Title - 5/5

The title is pertinent to the story. It matches the overall vibe of the story which is about dealing with depression and discovering a ray of hope amidst the chaos.

Synopsis - 5/10

The synopsis in my opinion is really short. It doesn't give away too much information, which is good, but it doesn't look appealing either. I suggest you add more depth to the storyline in the synopsis.

Plot - 20/30

In my opinion, the plot is not so rare. I've read many books, precisely many BTS fanfics dealing with depression and other mental health problems. I've only read a few chapters so I'm not sure how the story will turn out to be towards the end but I hope you add in your own twists and turns to make the story more amazing.

Character - 7/10

As usual, BTS members are used into the storyline which is not bad. It would've been better if you had not related them together example, how Yoongi is Jimin's brother and all because that's just plain. Like we see the BTS members as a group in almost every single fanfiction out there. Though I found the fact funny that you made Jungkook older than Hoseok lol.

Grammar - 20/25

A story is only appealing to read when the writing style and grammar are perfect or atleast readable. You story didn't have the perfect writing style but because of good grammar, the story was readable. There were spelling mistakes detected as well as absence of colons and semi-colons.

Writing style - 3/10

I'm really sorry but your writing style was totally out of line. You changed the POV's thrice in just one chapter, not to mention you wrote Jimin's POV back to back but I think it was supposed to be Y/N's POV which got mixed up. The paragraphs were too short and somewhat disoriented. You even used Bold and Italics so many times for no reason. It doesn't make sense and was really confusing. Please also refrain yourself from writing the short author notes in the bracket in the middle of a chapter, it makes the story unappealing to read. 

Overall:

Overall, the story is okay. Though I think it can be better if you consider the following points I mentioned above, specially for the writing style. The main thing that I liked about your story was the cover but even that needs a bit of changing. If you want you can head over to our community's graphic shop and request for a cover. I promise our designers will not disappoint you. I hope my judging was fair enough. :)

Review Scores = 68/100.

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