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Flower That Bloomed

Writer :: Justinseagul

Reviewer: haefatima99

Title :: Flower That Bloomed

Cover :: 6/10

The cover that is on the book, no doubt, screams for aesthetics. But since it was a Taekook book then I would naturally search for both of them. Your title was, "Flower that bloomed" and Taehyung holding a flower on it is definitely making me feel bloomed but I think there is something missing in it. That spark is Jungkook so add him to this cover. Your author username is missing as well. No matter what. Always remember that you are important too. So mention the author's name as well.

A quick tip: I am not self promoting but visit our community's graphic shop. We have talented graphic designers who are masters in graphic designing. They will make this book's cover more bloomed as the title says.

Title :: 5/5

Definitely, it was relevant to the theme of your book. This poetic story revolves around two lovers whose flowers were never bloomed but for some time. Most of all, your title was poetic but it can be more aesthetic if you want to change it. Poetry is something that demands food for thoughts. So I want to see your title as a feast for serving the hunger of your reader's thinking.

A quick tip: Go to Pinterest and search "poetic words" and I am sure you will find many words that could explain the theme of this book through the title. You may find some French, Japanese, English, or Spanish words but you can explain their meaning at the starting of your book. It will improve the attraction quality of your book.

Synopsis :: 3/10

My love, this was the criteria where I wasn't satisfied. There were only two lines that weren't giving me enough insight of your book. Your synopsis is something that should be eye catching, heart piercing, soul warming through words. Especially when it's a poetry book in prose then you need extra effort to show your readers the amount of blood, sweat, and tears that you put. Still, my love, I appreciate two lines of your thought complex. They weren't wrong but speaking some warmth of the story.

A Quick tip: Add the following things in your synopsis:

• Some more poetic lines
• brief introduction of characters
• theme of this book

Theme or subject :: 4/5

The theme or subject that you are trying to convey using the inspiration of the song, "The truth untold" is very heart piercing. You went perfectly with the choice of theme and subjects for this book. However, I would like you to make this book a little more developed in the matter of themes.

A Quick tip: Add some more background stories of Taehyung and Jungkook in one of the chapters. It should be in free verse.

Technicalities :: 7/10

As for this area, you need improvement.
Especially, the use of punctuation is very wrong in your book.

Sometimes, it is (..)
Sometimes, it is(.....)

Both are wrong because the ellipsis has only three dots. And four dots are an exception but let's not talk about it and make it complicated for you. But use only three dots.

Structure/form :: 3/5

You are using free verse form in your book. But sometimes, it switches to prose form. Especially in the first chapter. There is a difference between free verse and prose verse.

Free verse: It is a language organized for its musical effects of rhythm and sound. There is the organized metrical effect. However, these effects are used irregularly, not according to any completely fixed pattern. We don't have to follow a specific pattern but our own will decide everything.

Prose poetry is poetry written in prose form instead of the verse form. But it should follow the basic rules of poetic devices.

In your book, you used both. But try to stick to one.

Writing style :: 6/10

Your book needs proper formatting and you need to remove some extra spaces from the chapters. I understand you put them for the pause or break but still too much of it will make your reader feel tardy. I felt it myself.

Use more poetic devices like similes, metaphors, etc. I noticed you are using symbolism. Taehyung is represented as a moon. Jungkook is represented as a sun. And this is something that I loved the most.

You have to use more aesthetic vocabulary in your book because it's a poetry book. Your language is simple but as someone who loves to adore some more aesthetic words; I would recommend using more aesthetic words. 

Personal enjoyment :: 3/5

Personally, I loved the theme of the book and the story that you were trying to convey. Also, I loved the symbolism that you used for the characters. But still, your book looks very messy because of your writing style. I was unable to catch up because of it. You need to improve the presentation of your book and use some more good vocabulary. Show people that you are writing a poetic romance.

Overall, work on the areas above. If you love poetry and want to edit this book then I would recommend you to read some poetry books on Wattpad in order to get a general idea about poetry.

Total :: 37/60

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