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Complicated

Writer :: izzah_fiza

Reviewer :: haefatima99

Book :: Complicated

Cover :: 7/10

I loved the background image of this cover because Jungkook looks so hot and fresh meat here that anybody would be ready to click on the "read" button. Also, I fell in love with the font's style like neon touch is literally going so fine with it. Good that you added your author name too because it's one of the essential fronts of a cover.

A quick tip: The current cover will be more attractive if you make it in magazine style. It will add a romantic modern touch to it. It's just my suggestion.

Title :: 3/5

After reading 8 chapters of your book. I couldn't find any relevance to your plot. Are you referring to the complication of the fate that brought them in this position of separation? If so then this title is okay but considering the fact that your plot was way too trendy. This title is very trendy too. I won't say cliché because some people take this word cliché in a negative sense. Indirectly, your title is relevant. Directly, it might not excite your reader.

A Quick tip: After reading your book. I came up with few titles. You don't have to go for them. As your reviewer, they are my suggestions.

1- Fated for eternity
2- Disruption

Synopsis :: 2/10

Your synopsis is something that should be intriguing, pre planned sketch of your book, and an army front for your army (book) so that your reader (enemies) are prone to read your book. But when we look at your synopsis and read it then we find nothing exciting about it. It's almost like you are casually talking to us and just randomly telling us something. No character introduction, no conflict, no setting, and no stacks. It's not even giving me intriguing vibes.

A quick tip: Add some more information about Y/n, and Jungkook in it. Introduce the main conflict (problem) of the plot.

Plot :: 20/30

I don't want to use the word "cliché" for this book but literally, every scene was acceptable and predictable for me. When I started reading your book, I knew she was pregnant and I knew the child's father (Jungkook) was going to regret it later. When Jungkook and his child met in the park then it was also so predictable that I found no excitement in it. It was like I knew the whole plot right from the very beginning and it's kinda cliché. I am not asking you to change the whole plot but you need to change a few scenes that I mentioned above. Make them more excitable, and readable without making them to cliché.

A quick tip: Don't change this plot overall. Just make the pregnancy and their meeting scene more unique.

Characters :: 6/10

There was no development in your character as well. I was unable to feel their feelings of pain and misery. If a character is unable to give feelings to your reader then I am sorry it's not worth it. It's just a robot to whom you are giving commands. Remember that you don't have to make your character the puppets of words but you have to make them puppets of fate and other characters in order to get realism from them.

Grammar : 17/25

Your grammar wasn't bad but it wasn't satisfactory either. Your grammar errors in bullet points:

• wrong and excessive use of semi Colons and commas.
• no capitalization of names and proper nouns in some places.
• wrong usage of verbal tags in some places.

Writing Style :: 5/10

I am satisfied when it comes to the management of your paragraphs. They are neat and well organized. But there is no use of description that could tell your readers about characters, scenes, places, and things. I want you to describe things more clearly. Sometimes, small details matter a lot. How Jungkook was feeling when he met his child? Use realistic imagery to tell your readers about it. The description is everything when it comes to the writing style. So work on it but it's not mean I am asking you to be as descriptive as Shakespeare. Every writer has its own style. Make your own descriptive style and bewitch your readers with it.

Overall ::
I think I pretty much explained your lacks and experts through this review. Work on it and if you have further question then do ask me right away.

Total :: 60/100