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Pseudo Contract

Author : -lilacfilms

Reviewer : luvrtaekook

Pseudo Contract

Cover: 10/10

I love the soft and aesthetic vibe of the cover! I can see that you exerted a lot of effort into making your book cover. I really love how the font matches the background. Good job!

Title: 9/10

The title is unique. I had to read the story before knowing the meaning of the title. But it’s a nice title so far!

Synopsis: 9/10

I think you can put more previews in the synopsis. You don’t have to put a lot, just a bit of a cliff hanger or a thrill that hook up the interest.

Plot: 15/30

The story is too rushed and nothing is comprehensible. The plot will be good if you slow down your pace. You need to make it more detailed and add more facts.
The story lacks major details,
For example:- Jungkook knows her name or her family but But I didn't come across any such dialogue which stated so.

Characters: 5/10

As I said the pace was fast so the personality of the Character isn't clear either. Specially Jungkook, his grandfather was dying and he is chilling with mirae?
Also please try to make a real character. The character didn't seems real in this story.

Grammar: 15/25

The story has a lot of grammar (especially the use of punctuation marks and capitalization) and spelling mistakes. I saw a lot of errors usually the correct usages of I. It should be in the capital letter when it is used to refer to one’s self. I saw that you placed a note that you intended lower case, yet we need to follow the correct way of writing to avoid confusion.

Writing style 6/10

The writing style is a bit messy. Some of the part weren't clear enough. Please don't put something(like you put a car) between the same part, it will lead readers to think those are different scenes but they weren't.

Overall

I like the plot but due to the fast pace and grammar mistakes, I didn't enjoy the story. Add some more details on your story, especially your Characters personality description. Make them real with emotion.
Slow down your pace a bit and take things slow.
I advice you to read ur story for self confirmation cause when u do it you'll find ur own mistakes and thrive for better. I suggest using Grammarly or a virtual tutor to avoid grammar mistakes.

Review Scores : 69/100

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