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Never Let Go

Author :: Nefelibatas_world

Reviewer :: Taebaetae74

Title :: Never Let Go

Cover :: 10/10

Honestly, I love the cover of your book. The way the historical-type elements combined with the modern elements to form a single cover is just so creative. I especially liked the style of texts used for the title. I’m not one to give full scores for any topic in a review but I feel like your cover is very imaginative compared to the others I've seen these days, all I ever get to see are covers with neon themes and glowing texts.

Title :: 9/10

It’s not that you did a bad job here. I can see that the title matches the theme of the story very well. It’s just that this title is too common. You should’ve chosen one that was a tad bit more attractive and entrancing.

Synopsis :: 7/10

You could’ve done better. There were lots of errors in the sentence constructions and mistakes in capitalization. For instance, in the first line of the synopsis, you unnecessarily capitalized ‘J’ in ‘Just’ & ‘W’ in ‘Woman’.
Speaking of wrong sentence-construction, I’ll take the first sentence as an example. This is what you’ve written:

“A Woman's heart is a deep ocean of secrets. And it's like a locked book, Just needs a reader able to unlock the locked book.”

Here, you used the right words of course but arranged them in the wrong manner. The sentence would’ve sounded more appealing if it was expressed this way:

“A woman’s heart is a deep ocean of secrets. It’s like a locked book, waiting for an able reader to unlock it.”

Such errors run throughout the synopsis. Next, instead of quoting sentences and giving the name of the speaker, you need to find another way to reciprocate the same idea. You should always write your dialogues in either direct, or, indirect speech. Maybe, this is the way you want it to be; but I just found it to be less appealing.

Plot :: 20/30

Now don’t get me wrong, I personally think that your plot is very imaginative. Not many writers think of creating a Titanic-based BTS fan-fiction. You were brave enough to try something new. But, the reason why I’ve deducted 10 scores is because the scenes in your book were too rushed which made the plot look pointless.

Let me take the first chapter as an example. When the fiance leaned in for a kiss, she suddenly slapped him. That’s all good. But the thing is, you did not make an attempt to explain her feelings. The reader has no idea why she slapped him. Of course, she did not love him, and you said that. But what made her slap him when he leaned in? Anger? Disgust? Disappointment? None of it was explained.

Another example in the same chapter is when she was about to jump. All you said before she attempted to suicide was that she never got the love she craved for, and suddenly, she’s at the front of the ship ready to jump off. You should’ve explained them more. There was not even a proper paragraph that tried to deliver the reason why she tried to jump. And again, all of a sudden, she was surrounded by men. That doesn’t make sense right?

Explain the scenes more. As of now, I feel that you rushed the plot by not providing readers with details of the story.

Next, let’s talk about how you tried to involve all 7 men in the story. Now, I know that this is an OT7 FF. But, that doesn’t mean that Y/N interacts with BTS in all the scenes, not all 7 of them should be present. You could’ve given each member a separate personality and corresponding scenes regarding each member and how they choose to associate with Y/N.

Then, your scenes. I feel like you seldom added scenes of your own. Almost all the scenes from this book were exactly the ones from Titanic. You should’ve added more original scenes since this is just all too familiar.

Character :: 9/10

You did a good job here. It’s pretty evident that she eventually starts to embrace her flaws with all 7 men by her side. So, I don’t really have much to say on this topic. The reason why I reduced 1 point is because- as I've already mentioned before- the scenes were very rushed which gave little to no importance to the story’s flow.

Grammar :: 17/20

I won’t say your grammar is poor, but it definitely needs improvement. There were many places where you had either missed out on punctuation marks or unnecessarily added them. I noticed that you also used too many ellipses. Of course, I’m not saying that the usage of ellipsis is wrong, but using them too much can turn boring and lengthy. Avoid them and try to complete sentences with a full stop at the end. But putting these errors aside, I think you did a fairly good job. You had no errors regarding the tenses you used neither did you have any errors based on speech.

Writing Style: 6/10
Your writing style is simple- a bit too simple. There are no bases with explanations provided for the feelings the characters express or go through in the story. In simple words, the book lacks descriptive writing. Of course, you did describe some scenes, but they weren’t enough. This ultimately results in the reader not feeling the emotions delivered through your writings. When you provide your readers with detailed scenes- in an entrancing way- the respective reader will automatically have an emotional bond with the book and its character which in turn raises the quality of your book. The way you wrote them, wasn’t enough. Details. Everything lies in the details you provide your readers with.

Then of course, as I mentioned above, you need to pay more attention to your grammar and the way you construct sentences. And, as a writer myself, I wouldn’t recommend the usage of abbreviated forms of words when you write a book (like ‘kinda’, ‘wanna’, ‘y’all’, etc.)
You should also avoid the use of ‘inside jokes’ that only ARMYs know. I mean, it’s okay to use them in dialogues once in a while, but never use them while the story goes on (like ‘trusfrated’, etc.)

Overall::
If I’m being completely honest, I'm bored of this book due to the lack of contents. You need to pay more attention to your skills regarding descriptive writing. Like I said before, everything lies in the details- so take advantage of this fact the next time you write a book. Add more scenes of your own and avoid informal speech at all times. I wish you good luck and don’t hesitate to hit me up if you need any help regarding your works ;) Don’t be demotivated or offended, please. I am trying to help you :)

Total ::  78/100

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