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Conversion

Author : Bangtanlovvv

Reviewer: ialwaystanbts

Conversion

Cover : (1/10)

The cover was too plain for me. The font was small and your Wattpad username was not even visible. So far, I don't see a connection between the story and the cover. Hopefully, you can replace this cover with a better one.

Title : (2/5)

The title was interesting and caught my attention the moment I read it. After reading the title I thought that it was a story that was related to the conversion of a person's character but I was wrong. The problem with this title is that it doesn't resemble the story in any way.

Synopsis: (2/10)

I found the synopsis very intriguing but once again I don't think it represents the story in any way. There were also many grammatical errors in it which ruined the mood for me. (Quick tip: You should capitalize the first letter of a name or a surname.)

Plot: (21/30)

The plot wasn't the most unique one but it was entertaining for sure. I really like the scene when Taehyung and Y/N were having a fake date. I also think that your story is a bit slow-paced and that you should start writing more about Y/N's past.

Character: (9/10)

The emotions of the characters were displayed nicely. I had a fun time reading Y/N's savage comments and funny arguments. I also like the fact that the personalities of the characters differ from each other and are unique. Overall I had a lot of fun reading their personal stories.

Grammar : (15/25)

I found a lot of grammatical errors in your story. Let me note them down for you.

1. Ellipsis: Ellipsis (...) are represented by three periods. Not more, not less. I have seen you use a random number of periods (generally two) throughout the story so check that out because they are grammatically incorrect.

2. Capitalization: I have noticed that you tend to use lowercase sometimes when you begin a sentence. It is grammatically incorrect. Always capitalize the first letter of the first word of a sentence and the first word after a period.

3. Incorrect placement of punctuation marks: You have placed a lot of unnecessary/excessive punctuation marks in your story. For example:

"because I already told someone you're my boyfriend.."

"Because I already told someone that you're my boyfriend,"

I also found some paragraphs with inconsistent tenses, so do check that out.

Writing style: (8/10)

The chapters of your story were neither too long nor too short. You used simple words but it went well with the current funny aura of the story. There were also some spelling errors that needed proofreading to be corrected.

Overall:

Overall I liked the plot of the story but it would great if you start writing about the main events, especially Y/N's past. Make sure to edit all the grammatical errors in the story and I would also suggest you change the synopsis. I would keep reading this story if things spice up a little. The author was not that interactive but did answer the comments.

Total points : (58/100)

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