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Hitman

Author : jimoxn

Reviewer : sprite_and_hamburger

HITMAN

Cover - 2/10

The cover is not attractive at all. Hoseok with red lips?? I don't think it suits the 'hitman' look. The background has nothing and the font you use is simple, font color didn't match the background and I don't know why you used shadow and glow in the font.

Title - 3/5

The story is about a hitman so I guess the title suits the plot. I suggest not add 'Jung Hoseok' in the name of the title.

Synopsis - 2/10

First of all, there were plenty of grammar mistakes in the description and also the description wasn't eye-catching. The description you wrote is something you can find in Google, just search hitman meaning and you will see the same results. Try to add some preview or some cliffhanger scenes, it can hype your readers a bit.

Plot - 8/30

There is nothing for me to read so this is based on only 2 chapters. The plot and the scenes feel somewhat similar to me, I watched a kdrama 'Healer' with the same scenes. You wrote only 2 chapters yet you rushed too much. The story starts with her doing her business and in the next chapter, the person knows about the video?
You didn't write anything about him knowing yet he knows about it.
The scenes lack too much information, I suggest to add little details it can help readers to Imagine easily. Like you can add something like ''her body trembled after seeing the horrific scene before her eyes, her breathing raged a bit. She clenched her eyes and she released a shaky breath''. You can also add some details about the beating scene.
The plot is messy nothing is clear. I didn't even know who is present in the scenes.

Character - 0/10

I can't tell about the character without knowing them, I don't have any information about their character. Hoseok didn't appear in the scenes and the female lead didn't show any personality yet.

Grammar - 12/25

There were many grammar mistakes, like capitalization, verb, and punctuation marks. The vocabulary used in the book is poor. You can replace some words with more suitable ones.

Writing style - 2/10

I am not a fan of your writing style. It seems the paragraph was cut at the wrong time. The pace of the story is rushed and I didn't found the connectivity between chapters. The flow of the story wasn't good.

Overall :

I suggest you hire an editor, you can find many editing shops in Wattpad. You need to put more details and try to explain the scenes as much as you can. The cover of the story isn't eye-catching. I don't have much to say, this is all I can say based on two chapters.

Review Scores: 29/100

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