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00:00 Tomorrow

Writer :: Ocean_C

Reviewer :: haefatima99

Title :: 00:00 Tomorrow

Cover :: 8/10

The cover was neither too bad nor too good. It was giving me all the vibes of the plot that my eyes were looking for. The storyline revolves around Taehyung and the role BTS plays in his life is very prominent through the cover. What I want you to change are the font and its placement. When we are making a cover then our main concern is the placement of the title. If you placed the title right across the character's face then it's something that potentially ruins the pictorial quality of your cover. So change the placement of your title. Other than this, the placement of the quote and the author's name is very up to mark. Well done!

Title :: 5/5

Three words that I would say to you for choosing this title, "I love you" because it was something that intrigued me. Also, it perfectly matches your plotline, creating a kind of mystery for me that would make me stay up late at night so that I can uncover the mystery behind this. Also, the little plane symbol beside it is screaming for the authenticity of your plot. 00:00 is the time when the next day starts. I loved the way you went with the selection of the title.

Synopsis :: 8/10

Your blurb was very simple, to the point yet so exquisite. You have mentioned the introduction of characters indirectly yet so wisely. The main conflict (problem) of the plot was very reflective through your reasonable choice of your words. I loved the way you intrigued me with the brief introduction of the main female lead. But in the technical field, your description needs some work on.

A Quick tip: It's aesthetic to use fancy text but some readers who are using Android might face problems while reading it. Because in Android it's not visible and I had to switch to my tablet to see the font. So I recommend to avoid using fancy text in the description because its invisibility could cause confusion for some readers.

Plot :: 28/30

The plot is definitely something new to read as the storyline is emitting your ways of thoughts. I am sure your thought process is no joke and you are a very underrated author. You know very well how to shape a plot without making it too clinch, too slow paced, or too fast paced. I've never read even a single scene from this book anywhere else and that speaks the originality and realistic element of this plot. In the very beginning of the plot, your revelation of the conflict through Taehyung's panic attack was very reflective. As a person, who had faced a panic attack several times. I could say that you created a very realistic scene for this. I have seen many writers creating the scene of panic attacks strangely. And for me it's not appropriate but kudos to you for using such great words in the plot. Your plot is still ongoing so I can't say anything further about it. We still need to know the (falling action) denouement of the plot. Good luck!

Character :: 8/10

Okay, so your characters were way better than many stories I have read. You are using very descriptive language to describe them through indirect characterization. Emotional attachment is something that I search for when I am reading any book. And I am very happy to write in the review that I could feel the emotional attachment with Taehyung's characters as he was a reflection of my own self. The main female lead is a person who depicts every army out there. Throughout, I didn't feel any feeling like I was reading about some robots or puppets. I still feel that other BTS members need some more revelation in the book too. I hope you work on their development as well. As for the development, try to look at the main female lead. She needs development as well as she is the main figure of the book too.

Grammar :: 18/20

When it comes to the grammar then you definitely know the basics of it. Your sentence structure is poetic yet so exquisite in the most appropriate way. Few problems that I found are below.

• I noticed that you are having problems in terms of typos. I would point it out here so that you can go back and fix them.

[I toss my phone across my bed. Some people would storm the company building and demand an explanation. Some would threaten to expose them them to the press.]

"them" is repeated two times here.

• Sometimes, you are switching between tenses and it's noticeable but not a big error. You could easily fix it while editing.

[BTS hasn't been active since they came back to Korea after Jungkook was shot. In the hiatus, there were several scattered live streams and tweets by the members and lots of merch. ]

haven't been= present tense
Came, were, scattered= past

• There is no big issue with punctuation. Because of your complex sentence structure, you might face problems with a comma splice.

A comma splice is when you join two independent clauses without using conjunctions. There are three ways to fix a comma splice. You can add conjunction, change the comma to a semicolon, or make each independent clause its own sentence.

Writing style :: 7/10

I noticed that you tried to be descriptive by using simple words and vocabulary. I am not asking you to use vocabulary like that of Shakespeare but try to make your words deeper and more profound. Your paragraphs are too short; it would be better if you make the paragraphs normal size. Improve your sentence structure by using more aesthetic words other than "said" because you have to "show them not tell them."

Overall::
I loved your book because it screams originality. Your plot and character's emotional empathy are something that I loved the most. What I want you to do is to improve the description of your book including the development of your characters. The cover image isn't bad but I would ask you to order from our cover shop for a better cover that could attract your reader's attention more.

Total :: 82/100

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