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Sleep

Writer :: nammuboop

Reviewer :: Taebaetae74

Title :: Sleep

Cover :: 7/10

The cover was good but it isn’t eye-catching. When a person clicks on a random book, it’s mostly because of their cover. In my opinion, the cover is a bit shabby. The text used could’ve avoided being on Yoongi’s face claim. Either that or the background could be a little faded and given a see-through effect. Then, the text would’ve looked appealing. But at one look, the cover was classy, simple, and well-done.

Title :: 7/10

Like the cover, the title doesn’t do the job. It could’ve been a bit more imaginative. If it’s compulsory for you to use synonyms of sleep- like ‘Siesta’, ‘Forty Winks’, ‘Slumber’ etc.

Synopsis :: 6/10

The description provided is humorous but it does not interest a large number of readers, in my opinion. You could’ve added a bit more of a blurb relating to the story.

Plot :: 26/30

The plot overall was good. The way the writer tried to convey it needs more effort. Since it was not delivered the way it should’ve been, it goes unnoticed by readers.

Character :: 5/10

Character development is one of the most important elements in a book. In this story, Yoongi’s development in character was not evident enough. If your character doesn’t develop with time and the number of chapters, the respective readers could get bored of the contents provided.

Grammar :: 15 / 20

It needs improvement. At some points, the tenses of the words used were incorrect and were mixed at some points. If you choose to write your book or chapter in the past tense, I recommend you stick to it. Changing tenses here and there could be confusing to readers.

Writing Style: 6/10

The sentence construction could be improvised. The usage of words could be different and less common to impress the readers. This unknowingly increases the quality of the book. There was incorrect usage of words too- where you meant one word, but, typed another. You can just have your book edited.

The scenes could’ve been more descriptive too. When you describe what you write, (like the emotions the character feels as per the moment, other instances like when you look at a person’s appearance, etc.) it automatically creates an emotional bond between readers and the book which in turn can lead to more quality.

There’s no problem with writing short chapters. But when you do, make sure to add important scenes. The first lot of chapters were short, with little to no descriptive scenes. This could lead to a reader’s boredom in a book and stop reading the book half-way through.

The chapters could also be titled differently and repetition of scenes should be avoided.
But, in all, the writing style is simple and humorous. The way the writer blends the funny elements with other elements in this book is good and appreciative.

Overall ::
This book was a good one for readers who like typical plots. It just needs to go under major editing to correct its grammatical errors and scene constructions.

Total :: 72/100