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Sooner

Author: shookjin04

Reviewer: chemicalkrackel

SOONER

Cover: 9/10

I don't know but there's this thing about the cover that makes me so appealing even with no face claim.
maybe it's the color that resonates with the theme of the story or it's the momentum of it.
I like it and there's this unusual pull off its monochromatic attraction and I feel pulled. But the only thing that is not needed is the twice addition of your name or username instead I suggest you use a quote way of representing it.

Title: 5/5

simple beautiful and pulling is what it is. it's like it makes one suggest the chromium feel of the whole thing yet leaves the pondering syncs which is a blessing. It's not what you see. a lot.
And it's beautifully pulled together.

Synopsis: 10/10

I don't find any place of point cutting here. It's perfect.  a sneak peek of the book and the point that it's a fanfic
a lot was said between those lines
A lot could be felt and let's be honest not a lot would understand that
It is a complicated complementary of feelings abstract ones that are hard for many to understand but to me it's perfect. It speaks a lot between those lines.

Plot: 25/30

I would give 25 not because I see some holes but because I ask for proper focusing on function I want that feeling you know  some placing that would stay for long  the time placing was a problem. It is a suggested hole that not a lot would notice. All I want you to work on is the story format of it.

Character: 7/10

I want a better character pillar, a better formation of it. A little more feel it was a good pain that my heart had mustered because of your plot but the characters, I want better stage timings and better sensible functioning of them.

Grammar: 20/25

good grammar, not many mistakes but the sentence formation mistake or the presentations of tenses. The story had me so indulge that every time an error happened I would be like no okay lemme read again it was so very melancholic perfect but still that sync was broken because of the grammar error.

Writing style: 6/10

I like the story. no doubt. it's beautiful. but the writing style is what failed to make me feel better. The writing style should be more reflective of pain and diverse feelings that passed through the story. It was a beautiful mess of a story you served yet the writing style irked me. I wanted a better and supreme show of talent. A mature way of timings. I wanted a better way of constructing the way the characters led themselves. The interaction of heart to heart love or anything else I asked for feels and I want you to deliver that.

Overall :

The magnitude of the feeling of the story is mass and constructed with pain. It's like I could sympathize yet at the same time cuss faith for making it so miserable for them top of if all the only problem was the writing style and the grammar the major things that win the story and I want that from this piece. The plot is no less than to art that loses itself in the museum because of its unrecognizable state but all I ask for is the style you'll change it and it'll become the piece that won't ever get lost.

Review Scores : 82/100

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