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Flower That Bloomed

Writer :: Justinseagul

Reviewer :: kimvante_

Title :: Flower that Bloomed.

Cover :: 10/10

Okay, so first of all, whenever I read a ship book, I always recommend the authors to add both the characters of the ship onto the cover, but now that I see your book cover, I think you did a great job of choosing that picture of Taehyung without Jungkook because it gives away the entire vibe of the book. The flower in Taehyung's hand, the way he's using it to cover his face, it matches with the title as well as the storyline; dark and saddening.

Title :: 5/5

The title is pertinent to the story. Though grammatically, 'A Flower that bloomed' is more accurate. Please refrain yourself from displaying the title using aesthetic fonts. Not everyone could see it, and it doesn't look appealing.

Synopsis :: 5/10

The synopsis is way too short. I suggest you try and add more facts to intrigue the readers. Short synopses are not bad, yours is doing a great job in concealing the mysteries but I think you should add more points. Also, please refrain yourself from writing the synopsis using aesthetic fonts. As I've said above, not every device carries that option, plus it looks really unappealing.

Plot :: 1/30

There was no plot. You just wrote whatever the story behind the actual song was. 'The truth untold' by BTS is based on the same events that you have written down in your book. Getting inspiration from a song does not mean you copy down the exact same stuff that leads to the song being created. I had expected to see some creativity from your side, something from your own mind. The only thing you did was change the characters from Taehyung to Jungkook.

Character :: 1/10

The characters were, well, very obvious. There were no extra characters added or any character development. As I've said above, there was no plot, just the same story behind the song which leads to you creating the exact same characters as well. You could've at least tried to shape your own characters but you just wrote what the characters of the actual story were like. The only thing I found satisfying was how you wrote the last chapter in Jungkook's POV before he died, describing his feelings towards the guy by the window.

Grammar :: 15/25

A story is only appealing to read when the writing style and grammar are perfect or at least readable, yours was readable. There were absolutely zero rich and complex words, all you used was plain English words which was a major turn off. There were many missing words between sentences detected along with the absence of colons and semi-colons.

Writing style :: 1/10

Okay, so, the writing style was not attractive at all. I was not expecting paragraphs but I was also not expecting the gaps between each sentence. Some sentences had too many gaps while others were too close to each other. It made absolutely no sense. I suggest you leave only two lines of spaces between each sentence and if possible, turn them into paragraphs with some descriptive writing. The only thing I found appealing was how you used the italic font for your writing because it actually helped describe the emotions more openly.

Overall ::
Overall, I'm really sorry but the story does not make sense. As I've said, you just copied down the exact same plot and characters of what the entire song was wholly based on. No one would find your story interesting because everyone knows and has read about the real story from the SMERALDO account on twt. If you can, then please rewrite the story, add your own constructed plotline as well as your own designed characters. Please don't get discouraged by my opinion though, I really hope you can take my thoughts into further consideration for your future works. I hope my judging was fair enough. :)

Total :: 38/100

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