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The Songstress and the Shade

Writer :: Jishi13

Reviewer :: SURREALGGUK

The Songstress and the Shade

Cover :: 4/10

I see that you included both Cha Mee and Jisoo, and Cha Mee has a sort of ghost-ish vibe which goes with your concept, so that’s a good aspect of your cover. However, the font used is almost unreadable, and I had to guess to be able to discern what your title was. I know you might have been trying to go for an aesthetic look, but the main priority is to make sure the readers can read the title. In addition, although the cover contains the two characters, it looks like a sloppy job done. In fact, it looks like you were rushing for time and didn’t put much effort into it, which is a big mistake. Readers on Wattpad face mountains of books, and to attract them into reading yours specifically, you need a good cover, one that’s going to catch their undivided attention. I understand that not everyone has the skills to make covers (me included), but KPOP House has their own graphics shop with a team of talented and efficient graphic designers who are willing to help you out.

Title :: 5/5

Your title is unique and conveys the concept of your story. I’ve never seen a book with a similar title like yours. I’m very impressed!

Synopsis: 6/10

Your synopsis definitely helped me gain a better understanding of your story without revealing too much and spoiling it in the process. However, I have some questions. Is the whole story going to be about Cha Mee helping Jisoo with her problems (which isn’t shown in the book at the moment)? Where’s the conflict? Like the cover, the font you used should be changed to make it readable. Furthermore, the grammar you used made it difficult to understand as well. [In one hand,] should be [On one hand,], [fate fan] doesn’t make sense here, though I’m not sure what you’re going for, so I can’t correct you. [story of bond] should be [story of the bond]. [come out of the problems] does not make sense. How does one come out of a problem?
It should be [solve the problems] instead. In your synopsis explanation in the introduction chapter, you mentioned that Cha Mee is a diehard fan, but in the actual description it's [dead fan]. These two have completely different meanings and could end up making the readers confused about what you are trying to convey to them.

Plot :: 7/30

I’m going to be brutally honest here, no sugarcoating at all. While the concept of your story, the entire notion of having a ghost and an idol fall for each other is unique, the plot isn’t. In fact, your plot seems like any one of those generic and cliche fanfiction you come across every single minute on Wattpad. This is going to be a big problem for you because if you’re able to entice readers with your synopsis like you enticed me, you need to make sure you deliver a good story, one that’s going to be up to the readers’ expectations.

The readers’ expectations are going to be really high, of course, considering that they’ve come across all kinds of books in this fanfiction community. Your story here does not even approach the readers’ expectations. It’s generic, there’s no actual plot. I’ve read all your chapters and there’s been absolutely no development between Jisoo and Cha Mee other than the occasional ‘stalker’ messages and Cha Mee creepily following Jisoo around while supposedly ‘helping’ her. You tried to bring in antagonists to spice up the story, but you’re not utilizing her to her fullest advantage. The things that she does to add flavor to the story really don’t spice up the story.

In fact, her character is so predictable I didn’t even want to continue reading. Is the entire plot going to have her in it? That’s not going to make the readers want to continue. You should develop the relationship between Jisoo and Cha Mee, make them more than just a ‘stalker fan on another level’ and an ‘idol who is unsure of her place in the group’. By doing so under twenty or so chapters, you’ll be keeping the readers interested. Yet the story is reaching thirty chapters and still there's no clear development of your characters and their relationship, it seems about 20% done.