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Midnight Drift

Reviewer: yoonchim_Z

Author: kimvante_

Midnight Drift

Cover: 10/10

I'm impressed with how it does represent Jungkook's racing half (the leather jacket does make a good show) without placing a car in the background, which would've definitely ruined the aesthetic, meaning lesser points. There's an aura about it that attracts, I can't describe what I truly mean but let's just say it dragged me the way Jungkook dragged antis into fans. Exaggerated yes, but it's a better way of saying I love it.

Title: 5/5

Creative and aesthetic. Suits the racing theme very well. It definitely pulled me in, hell I was reading the book before I knew it. I legit have nothing more to say other than the fact that you definitely a hundred percent should not change it under any circumstances. I like it. It's all good. Do. Not. Change. It. Unless you want your marks to lessen.

Synopsis: 9/10

The dialogues were interesting. The hidden humor behind it had me smiling. The description below needs a little fixing however, it's easy to tell that the secret was the racer being Jungkook. So it reveals the "big secret" right there. It dragged me into reading not gonna lie, it's just missing a few tiny touches to really suck in readers.

Plot: 22/30

Meeting Jungkook and Taehyung was cliche, as you very politely mentioned when Jungkook crashed into Aera's body in the midst of rushing to class. And when it comes to Yoongi's secret identity, I don't know if you planned on hiding it from the readers because it was really obvious when you wrote about him appearing home, at 10 pm, wearing leather pants that you very conveniently said he didn't like. If you were planning on hiding it, it's a bit of a poor job. Don't make it too obvious.

The first few chapters were dull, common, cliche. I waited so patiently for the "racing" part of the plot. That's the only part that truly stands out in the story. Albeit that, it's just boring and so common for romance plots. Even as an au, it's unrealistic. Since the story is focused on races, build more on that instead of the attraction between Aera and Jungkook. Let their little romance story grow on its own. An adventurous romcom is what attracts people, you have the base, now all you need to do is improve and add more touches to the story.

Character: 5/10

Most heroines were either too innocent and stupid, or badass. Aera is clearly the latter choice, and there's really nothing attractive about her. Fiesty yes, but very basic characteristics. Jungkook was a literal cutie with a whiny behavior with his hyungs yet arrogant with the main. Amongst all the characters, he had the best personality. Still common but interesting to say the least.

Grammar: 15.5/20

Ofcourse isn't a word, remember that it stands of two words, "of course". Definitely spelled as definetely in the second chapter and a few other misspelled words (noddles- it's spelled as noodles). And you seem to can't tell when to use "say" and "tell" because they were repeatedly used wrongly. Ex: "You haven't said Yoongi..." After replacing the 'said' with 'told' you'll get: "You haven't told Yoongi..."
Isn't that so much better?

Writing Style: 6/10

You need to look over the lengths of each paragraph. They are really long and from a reader's point of view, there's no guarantee that they'll be willing to go through all that. Skipping over a couple of sentences when it gets boring is a common play. The first paragraph at the start was exaggerated, could've been cut shorter. Your writing style gets a bit boring when it comes to the sentences' presentation. Learn to build more complex sentences, rich words, and expand to a bigger vocabulary.

Overall :

As a writer myself (not a perfect one but I do try), I used to write extremely long paragraphs as well. Medium sized ones are incredibly easier to write and it's a big boost for your motivation to keep writing. Also, expand your vocabulary. It'll help you build as a writer. Your sentences in terms of grammar are alright, but I'd love to see more complex sentences and rich words. It raises the quality level of your story. It gets better in the later chapters so fix up the first few ones. As a reviewer, it's cliche but as a reader, it's not a bad read at all. I looked back as a reader and I enjoyed it. Work on your skills and you're good to go, fighting Fae!!

Review Scores : 72.5/100