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Like An Arrow In The Blue Sky; Another Century Flies

Author: serendipifics

Reviewer: wuwtaetae

Like An Arrow In The Blue Sky; Another Century Flies

Cover: 4/10

The cover looks cute and aesthetic but is it really the one for your book? It looks like an edit than a cover. It also doesn't show the elements of the book, I don't feel like the cover is part of the story. It just doesn't give me an idea of what the story could be about. There aren't any elements showing their past life. I really think you should change the cover.

Title: 3/5

Too long, it's just too long. It could've been a dialogue than a title considering its length. It might be a little fitting, yes, but I just don't think titles need to be this big. It's just unattractive when it comes to Wattpad.

Synopsis: 4/10

It doesn't draw me in. I just think that you could've added something more interesting. I get the first sentence but the party where you mentioned how frequently jimin gets his dreams just seemed so redundant, and well, that's basically your whole synopsis. Too short and redundant. It could be improved so much. I think both the title and the synopsis are fitting when it comes to AO3 but if we're talking about Wattpad it's just a big no.

Plot: 24/30

It's very uncommon. The plot isn't totally original as I've read two to three books like this but it's only read to three tho. It was really cute even though I think that wasn't what this was going for. I like how you merged the past life and present life perfectly without confusing the readers. It's a pretty good plot, you've used it well.

Characters: 5/10

They're a little blurry. They're confusing sometimes too. Why does jimin wake up crying when all he did was a dream of his lover? Why does jimin just marry haeun without even thinking for a minute? They just feel a little bland too, without backstories. I couldn't find any development too.

Grammar: 22/25

You've got good grammar! When I first started reading, I prepared myself for the worst but thankfully, I didn't have to go through anything bad. You don't have the perfect grammar but it's understandable and definitely Good.

Writing style: 7/10

It's simple and nice. Very understandable, not too compliment. I just feel like your writing style would definitely fit Twitter aus, it has this cute style. Since the book is a little serious, I think you should use more new words a d improve your vocabulary. Try writing with depth. Get into it.

Overall:

I think it's a good book with a great plot, just needs a makeover.

Total: 68/100

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