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One Last Hug

Author : Zandra996

Reviewer : guliamalia

One Last Hug

Cover : 3/10

The cover you used for the story was not that attractive and it was not giving the vibe of the story. It looks like you just put some photos in the background, it wasn't a creative one tbh. The font color and style was too simple. It will be great if you use a couple hugging pic or some shadows pic, it will give your cover a more matching with the storyline.

Title : 4/5

The title was perfect for the story. It gives the idea about the story and the depressing feeling about their situation. It was good.

Synopsis : 8/10

The info you put in your description was enough to catch the reader's interest. It wasn't too revealing or too confusing, just a perfect amount. Nothing more nothing less.

Plot : 13/30

It was really hard for me to understand the plot because there wasn't much to read. I know it's a letter/diary style but you can at least give more chapters to understand. The plot wasn't that clear, you said she killed her parents but there wasn't any info on why she killed them. There were some plotholes as well, she had heart cancer but her brother doesn't have any idea about it. I can get the fact that Jungkook doesn't want any type of relationship with her but cancer doesn't pop out of nowhere.

Character : 4/10

There wasn't much to understand about the characters but still the personality of the characters was quite confusing. At the start, Jungkook was hating on her because she killed their parents but when he comes to know about her being ill then he suddenly forgives her? You didn't write much about Jinha's character.

Grammar : 21/25

I found some grammar and punctuation mistakes in the story and there were some typos as well. It can be removed by some little editing.

Writing Style : 7/10

The writing style you choose for starting was good but there some lacking in the chapters. You can at least give some more information. Some vocabulary can be changed with something more suitable. There was no need for you to change the POV because you can easily write about Jungkook's in 3rd POV, you don't have to use his POV.

Overall :

Overall it's a good story, some minor mistakes can easily avoid by some editing. You have the potential to write, keep writing!

Review Scores : 60/100

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