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Pain Brings True Love

Author : asthkook

Reviewer : chemicalkrackel

Pain Brings True Love

Cover : 1/10

In the most forbidding ways, your cover was boring, overlapped, overwhelmed, and a disaster.
As the story goes the depiction of true love through the dark spectrums of reality is forecasted but the cover was everything you call bright because to me it appeared as the overlapped work where you see different characters and the love interest but nothing about it amusing and the font attachment is poor, I am really sorry to say but that my love is a bizarre disaster that you have dished out to me.
My most recent advice to you is to change the overall theme of the cover, make it darker and gloriously powerful.

Title : 0/5

Is that a statement my love because that's what it seemed to me, a cringy, old fabled title that is used for books with the storyline as yours.
It had nothing that made me happy, it made me out drained at the moment I first heard about it because it was just corny, too much, and too long to be something proper, all I could do was drain my brain cells.
I want to suggest you go on the web and surf to detach for words that suit your story and give a better feeling that isn't close to cringy because I in no fucking way want a corny dish too sweetened served to me.

Synopsis : 2/10

Boring, too long, too much to take in, a lot many of unnecessary punctuations, why? they weren't needed, you could simply choose the most simple and catchy way to pry on people to read your book by adding a short and crisp description instead of the long-ass thing you bored me with, all it reflects was the corniness and cringy aura the book served.
Next time you edit your book please make sure that it's the description you edit out first because to me it's not only long but also very revealing, instead of that much effort you can simply add up something like this

the love we shared sang the hymns of nothing but the classic odes of pain but what if that symphony was broken by the desire of the high infatuations of yours and mine?

Plot : 4/30

Cliche as it sounds, more of a headache it is.
You know cliches are okay but they are too much of a sweetener when you add them with the corny description of every scene with a lot many of punctuations, one thing I'll ask you to note down in that too sweet notebook of yours is that sweetheart a lot of overwhelmed not needed punctuations aren't interesting but they are a headache and not needed addition to the scene.
Moving on it wasn't something new, old thinking what rich life is, a shady business of wealth but lemme write that down on your pages of life that sweetheart, not all rich life is that poor stabled, the one that you wrote about is a toxic life of nonexistent decorum and shame but if you go around the world and notice then you'll know that the life of rich kids is more of that of reputation, it costs you your life when you are always in the spotlight, blinded with glamour, it's a fight, it's not a cliche made to fill your empty pages so the next time you get eager to touch that topic just remember what I calculated and your memory and the world around.
The most important business I'll share is that use new ideas instead of sticking to old Wattpad cliches that are too bad to be read with a cup of coffee.

Characters: 0/10

Not very fond of the puppets you wrote of, old classic role models of a snitch sleeping with a bad boy by looks but good at heart boy, to cliche and non realistically unpleasant ideas of your pillars.
The most important thing I'd like you to know is to check your facts and change the mindset of rich kids or posh life.
And remember to create characters that are supposed to be imaginable and not non realistically unpleasant because all your characters do to me is make me cringe.
It's just too astounding to take in and too not needed, make better storylines for each so that I can get attached to them instead of wanting to get them away from my screen.

Grammar : 4/25

The grammar of a book makes it seems a better treatment but my love you have lost the reason for me to read your book again because not only it's a bizarre feeling of words but also an assault to the words.
Try using better words that give me feels and chills of what the pain of love's heat is, something that'll give me an ache in my chest that won't go away simply, something that'll kiss me with nothing but love's picture.
Refer to major topics in the English language so that you not only improvise over the fractures of the broken language of yours but also the effective not needed punctuations of yours.

Writing Style : 0/10

It's just so poor and unimproved, it's a mess, not a beautiful one but a bizarre mess of unwanted disastrous recipes.
It's like the writings I'd find over some kids cliche story where you ring in all the wrong positions of putting up the positioning of the punctuations and also the non-effective words you have taken to use.
Try making drafts that have the weight of power that gives me the tips of feels instead of a non-accepted cringy cliche that make me heat up with the lashed out unimpressive usage of your style.

Overall :

Can't say that your book was a good read, as cliche and wrong it can go it was all, everything that I didn't need, and never wished for, improvise on the places I asked you too but if you don't then I am so sorry you can't be helped and my review was a waste of my time and energy that made me type words that mounted to over 1000+ and not to forget the time I took off my studies.

Review Scores : 11/100

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