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Consumed by Our Mate Bond [Ash]

Book: Consumed by Our Mate Bond
Author: DreamieAster
Reviewer: _Ash_es
Chapters read: 5

Cover: 5/5
Okay that cover is really intense, definitely eye-catching, looks professionally made and matches the story perfectly.

Title and blurb: 8/10
Title is hooking. The blurb is impressive. The mechanics, I didn't see any errors. Though, there was a bit of redundancy in there. You mentioned that the main girl was freed by her alpha in the beginning and then you did again in the middle.

Introduction: 15/20
Oki, so it started off with the main girl expressing her anger and hatred towards these particular people. Her reason for feeling this way was understood after we got to witness the maltreatment and abuse given to her by her cousin and the others in the house. Then the story became intense when the screaming started and finally, when she apparently, found her mate. It was an intriguing beginning. Now the cons. There were a few instances where you were telling instead of showing. Like, ‘by the look of terror on his face, it must have been a big deal.’ Tell us that his pupils were dilated? or maybe that his mouth was hanging open or something like that. I dunno, my expression of terror is strange. Anyways, it helps the readers to picture the character vividly. The readers can also experience these emotions like they're the ones feeling them. Finally, in punctuation. In your dialogue tags, the word commimg after the ending quotation should start with a small letter except it is the pronoun 'I’ or a proper noun. E.g. “Reviewing is fun,” she said. “Yes, it is,” Ash replied. There were also some places where you used commas where you were supposed to use a full stop.

Mechanics: 7/10
Except from the dialogue tag punctuation and the other errors I pointed out above, the mechanics are really good. The paragraph spacing is nice and makes it easier to read. The grammar is correct and there were no spelling errors.

Plot: 4/5
The story line is engaging. The fact that the main girl wants to be apart of the rouges is really interesting. I love the chemistry between the two love interests. The pacing was a bit slow at some parts though.

Originality: 8/10
I like the ideas. Plot is intriguing though I think you should have added a bit more creativity to your vampire world. There are a lot of stories like it and you need something unique to set yours apart, even with an interesting plot.

Writing style: 16/20
Simple, easy to flow through the story. Amazing descriptions. A little of telling instead of showing, like I said before. Some weak sentences that could be spiced up with just a few different word choices.

Enjoyment: 15/20
Not gonna lie, I actually enjoyed the story. It had a great start and the story line afterwards was very captivating. I like the possibility of her actually joining the group and I love the fact that she is willing to take the risk to leave the house to find that valuable necklace. There were just some parts that were a bit boring to me.

Total: 78/100

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