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Rudiment [Vi]

Book: Rudiment
Author: v_nuslvr
Reviewer: WarmCupofSparkles12
Chapters read: 2

1: Gone
Pacing: 10/10
It’s a nice pacing, yet it shocked me (kinda) when Thalassa was drowning at the very beginning of the story. Also, I read the introduction before starting the first chapter, so I got a mental idea for what the story had to offer; Greek mythology. (I’m a sucker for mythology, though I don’t know much)

Characters: 9/10
First of all, THE AESTHETICS ARE BEAUTIFUL. Thalassa is my favorite so far because she reminds me of my Descendants OC my sister helped me make; Desiree Jones. I’m glad you put a small inside note that Metis was one of Zeus’s women because I had zero clue who she was in the first place.

World building: 8/10
And we’re getting an exact time since Thalassa drowned herself. But why??? But I’d like to know where Thalassa was when she tried to drown herself. Also, when she mentioned Zeus and his hormonal rampages, I kinda giggled. Also, reading the rest, it says she grips a wall on her right. Is she in a room? If so, then what kind of room? … Oh, she’s in the bathroom. It threw me off, but got me back on track when you mentioned the tub. And the way I read the “If you think milk is before cereal” paragraph (and the comments) I want to say that I found myself giggling. For me, it’s cereal before milk.

2: Fake
Pacing: 9/10
For 9 minutes, this was good. I liked the reveal of Tessa’s friends. It wasn’t too sudden, and based on the aesthetics from the intro, I could get a glimpse of what they are going to be like and who their Greek god/goddess was. It was cool.

Characters: 9/10
I find it interesting that (in the chapters I’m reviewing) we get a good view into Thalassa’s point of view. From what I’ve been reading, she seems sarcastic and moody. Also, the introduction to the three new characters (Kara, Jordan, and Luca) that were on the beach with Tessa was nice. I was also a little like “woah wait” when I read six people.

World building: 8/10
It’s not much, but I would like a description for what the beach looks like when Tessa is “seeing double.” Is there sun? Or is it cloudy? Not that the shivering gives it away, but you know how it could be sunny and cold at the same time? That’s what I mean.

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