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Renewed Promises: Love's Second Chapter [Ash]

Book: Renewed Promises: Love's Second Chapter
Author: mini_writes23
Reviewer: _Ash_es
Chapters read: 5

Cover: 4/5
I love the blend of colours on there. I love what you did with the black and white, the background and everything. It's such a dazzling one! The only fault here is that I couldn't see your name clearly where you wrote it below. I suggest you use a clearer colour, prefarably black.

Title and blurb: 6/10
Simple and and emotional title. I like it. The thing you did with the blurb was really creative. And as simple and consice at it was, it captured my interest so much. Although, towards th ending I was getting a bit confused with who s he was going to marry. I suggest you rephrase that part so it becomes clearer.

Introduction: 15/20
It was a cute beginning. We got to know the main girl really well. We know about her lover and the struggles she faces as a wife to be. It was very understandable how she craved her freedom and I liked how she set boundaries between her and her husband to be. It was a very emotional start. It was a hard time reading though beacuse you start with a different language and then write the English version after and it made it kinda confusing.

Mechanics: 9/10
Almost everything here was perfect. The only problem I had was the dialogue. I find it difficult to tell who's talking sometimes. It slowed down reading and also made me lose interest there. Try to indicate who's talking at a particular time to avoid confusion and loss of interest.

Plot: 4/5
There's a lot of drama here and there. Oh wow, it's such a tense story with a sad tone. The narration was brilliant too.

Originality: 6/10
It's has a gripping story line and the characters are really likable and unique but I won't say it's a hundred percent original. It has its elements that set it apart definitely but it's really hard to not notice the little parts that are a bit cliché.

Writing style: 16/20
Simple, smooth and easy to read. I love it! Though during editing, I advise you to go enhance a few sentences by replacing some words so they sound more professional.

Enjoyment: 16/20
To be honest, I really love what I read. At the end of each chapter, I wanted to read more because it was so interesting! Most Indian stories I read are really cliché, boring and not written very well but yours is an exception. Keep up the good work!

Total: 76/100

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