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Verses of Devotion [Dee]

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by MelloniaCommunity

Book: Verses of Devotion
Author: Rising-Queen
Reviewer: DHBurnside
Chapters read: 5

Ideas: 4
Details and content: 4
Organisation: 4
Introduction: 3
Voice: 3
Word choice: 3
Spelling: 2
Analysis: 3

Maa Durga
This is engaging. There was a couple of spelling errors that need to be fixed but overall, interesting start.

Day 1 - Maa Shailputri
Seeking your blessing we commence auspicious Navratri – This is a good line but it didn’t flow well from the previous lines. Navratri doesn’t rhyme with any of the other words like above.

The last line – as a whole. I don’t think this fits. I’d recommend to review or remove.

Day 2 Maa Brahmacharini
We honour you on the second day with delight. Add the.

Day 3 Maa Chandraghantha
I could see no improvements. This was beautifully written.

Day 4 Maa kushmanda
This is a beautifully written piece like day 3. The last line: help us to protect your created. Natural serenity. I think the full stop is probably a mistake here.

Overall, I think this is an excellent prose collection. Well done.

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