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❝ 𝐅𝐢𝐨𝐧𝐧 ❞ ↳ Translated from Gaelic ↳ Fair with wisdom, bravery and a connection to the mystical and natural world Step into the enchanting realm of 𝐅𝐢𝐨𝐧𝐧 and immerse yourself in a world where mythical forests come to life. Unveil the sec...

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Refrain [Dee]

50 5 2

by MelloniaCommunity

by MelloniaCommunity

Book: Refrain
Author: Eli_Akime
Reviewer: DHBurnside
Chapters read:

Ideas: 4
Details and content: 4
Organization/Structure: 4
Introduction/Closure: 4
Voice: 4
Spelling: 4
Analysis: 4

Overall, you’re an excellent writer and I would highly recommend that you either publish this story yourself or bring it to an agent.

The only recommendation I have here are the chapters are very long for Wattpad and I would suggest to split them up. As a book this works fine.

Excellent writing skills. Very discriptive with a lot of action. There wasn’t a lot of dialogue to read and I would suggest to add some as it helps to bring a story to life. In some parts of the chapters, there was a certain amount of information dumping which although was interesting to read I think too early on without getting into the story can make it long. I would suggest to drip feed it more and break up lengthy piecies with more dialogue – this could be a personal choice.

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