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The Dragon Emperor [Ash]

Book: The Dragon Emperor
Author: LMNTrix117
Reviewer: _Ash_es
Chapters read: 5

Cover: 5/5
It is an amazing cover, perfect for a fantasy book. It's hard to skip. The colour blend, the way the title is arranged makes it look successfully cool.

Title and blurb: 6/10
The title is giving intense fantasy vibes. It's telling that the story will be violent and full of action. Now honestly, the blurb was too long. And despite the lengthiness, it wasn't even clear enough. It doesn't have that captivating power, unlike the cover portrayed. It should be a short summary of the story, not the telling of the entire story line. For a good story, especially fantasy, the blurb should contain the protagonist, the setting, the conflict and the stakes, that is the consequence of not achieving the main goal or not stopping the problem. Your blurb doesn't have a central conflict. It's like all the problems are just side quests. Long story short, I suggest making the description look more professional, start by telling readers what the main character is, like you did, then state what his main problem and his main mission is going to be. Finally, try to give a hint to what is going to happen if he doesn't achieve the goal in the end. And don't forget the setting. Trim away the unnecessary and redundant portions and try to make it less congested. A good blurb is very important because it determines if a reader shall stay…or fling the book away (well, in the case of a paperback) but you get the idea.

Introduction: 6/10
Nice start. It was good getting to know Johnny and I like the thing you did in the prologue about the galaxies. It was super creative. But as I proceeded, I noticed there was a lot of info dump and that made it boring. Also, the chapter was kinda long. I think the prologue should be in a separate chapter from the other parts. At least I think that's the prologue, cause I saw ‘present’ and ‘beginning’ so it was confusing. But it was still a good one. I like the way you made them express their emotions. It was intriguing but try to lessen the info dump.

Plot: 4/5
Overall nice plot. Interesting dialogue and exceptional narration. I like the way you describe the fighting scenes and I like the way the story is progressing. It's a complete contrast to the impression the blurb gave me. So you need to work on it.

Mechanics: 8/10
This was impressive. The grammar, spelling and paragraph spacing was perfect. Your dialogue punctuation, one thing I notice many people have with their works was also done correctly. The only problem here was that there were places where you omitted commas.

Originality: 10/10
I have to give you everything here. Great world building, cool powers, amazing story line. It's a unique story.

Writing style: 7/10
A commendable one. You have a good vocabulary and good sentence structure. I really like the way you describe the fighting scenes, like I said before, the way to describe emotions, everything.

Enjoyment: 7/10
There were a couple issues and some parts weren't as interesting as some. But truthfully, it's a nice story. Just learn from your errors and keep up the good work.

Total: 83/100

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