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RajKahani [Abiya]

Book: RajKahani
Author: SubhankiIndia
Reviewer: Ablazeisaleo
Chapters Read: 5

Cover and Title (3/10):
I do see how you have got your main protagonist on the cover and it does fit for an Indian mythical novel, however, I would suggest having something more attractive as it grasps the attention of the readers easily.

Blurb (2/10):
The blurb needs an overall write-up. It does mention a princess and the social setting in the era but that’s about it. Readers are clueless about who this princess is or where is she from and thus I would suggest having a detailed blurb with everything in place filling in readers with what they are going to grasp from this novel without giving away too much.

Character Description (6/10):
I love how Zen is portrayed throughout the chapters as not so an ordinary elf but I would have loved to read more about Kevyn, Rob, and many other characters as less description about them makes the readers forget about their appearance in the book which is a huge loss as obviously, all our characters be it a main or a cameo is important in a whole. Apart from that it’s amazing to see the overall setting and description.

Plot and Writing Style (5/10):
The story is quite short and the paragraphs are crowded with a lot of information dumped on them which might bore the readers right away. There is no mention of Sandhya’s character or her thoughts and the ratio of descriptions to dialogues is very off. I would suggest having a re-writing of the entire book with more chapters, more dialogues, and less wording to make it more readable.

Grammar (7/10):

Regarding grammar, it’s more on the sentence structure than on the word itself. I would suggest using grammar checkers to rectify the issues.

Overall, the story has great potential but with the changes mentioned above it’s going to be a gem!

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