Author: NickfEast
Plot:
This plot seems to be one that is unique and fairly interesting. I don't have much to say on it, save for the fact that it feels like it is going to take decades for anything to happen, as the pace is excrutiatingly slow.
4/5
Grammar:
You have impeccable grammar, and overalll it seems like you have edited this story. I don't have much to say here either, but, the good stuff is coming, just wait for it.
5/5
Descriptions:
Once again you have decent descriptions. Are they my most favorite in the world? No. But does that matter? Not really. You get the job done, even if they are more on the clunky side rather than elegant flowing. With that said they do seem to flow with a touch of elegance, so honestly I don't know where I'm at here.
4/5
Characters:
Listen I have a bone to pick with the main character. He is as dry as they come. Nothing about him sparked any interest in me, save for the fact that it fascinated me how he analyzes and goes through EVERY possibility and seems to think about everything. I understand that that is his personality, but oh my gosh, it was painful. I'm sorry, but that's really how I feel about him. I'm giving you points though for how well thought out and consistent his character is, because he really is.
4/5
Overall:
Now this is going to be the good stuff. Just to start this out, I love to read fantasy and alternate worlds, I have read so many books in this genre and I really do enjoy it. Now, with that said let's get into it. I'm going to be straightforward and brutally honest when I say that this was painful for me to read. And it wasn't because you had bad grammar, or you didn't describe anything, or any of the usual culprits. The issue I had was with the pacing and how blocky and thick everything is. I had such a hard time reading through it all and not skipping over the paragraphs. There is just so much, and to me none of it felt esstential at all. Like him going over the other possibilities he had to escape? Why does that mean anything to me as a reader? I honestly couldn't give a rat's ass. Or him going on about the prison and the guards? What does it have to do with the plot? I felt like I was reading a textbook. Your writing really is good, it's unique and a breath of fresh air in wattpad, but holy hell dude you were killing me. The same thing goes for the pacing. I can do a slow paced book, but with how thick the reading was it was so hard to take it in and not get restless. I tried really hard and I really wanted to like this book, and I think it has potential, but I just can't get the pacing and the random things that don't feel important at all.
I don't mean to offend you by this, it's just me telling you how I feel about it. ;)
Final Score
17/20
