Author: ItzLyfe
Plot:
It seems the same as many other stories that I have read. It comes across as cliche, even though you say that it isn't. I don't feel like there is anything overly unique about it, though I could be wrong. Either way, there is nothing impressive, or shocking about it.
2/5
Grammar:
This story needs to be edited. Your grammar is okay, but there are a decent amount of mistakes that you need to go through and fix those things, as they will enhance the reading quality once fixed.
3/5
Descriptions:
There aren't any. At least not any true descriptions that allow the reader a deeper look into the story. You need to incooprate these into your writing, you don't need a ton, but enough that the reader can be more immersed and invested in what is going on.
2/5
Characters:
The main character in this story is one that I have read numerous times. She is simple and nosy, and then when she gets caught she will assumable push off the blame or be surprised by it. But, past that she has no life. Nothing about her is jumping out of the pages at me. She is dull, and without any spark for me to enjoy reading. It's like salad without anything on it, it's just plain, boring leaves. Add more to her character and breathe life into her so that she is basically jumping off of the screen at me.
2/5
Anything Else I Don't Like:
'Ow!!'
What are you trying to get across here? If it's supossed to be dialogue it is incorrect, and if it's her thoughts it is also incorrect.
'To Kaitlyn...'
If she is reading this then that makes the oww something she read as well. You don't need the ' or the bold. It will look a lot better in the scheme of things if you use italics, as we already know that she is reading it, the reader just needs conformation, without getting assaulted with bold. Though technically bold is fine, I just hate how it interrupts a story on wattpad, because it's so bold.
Your story doesn't flow at all. It is super choppy, and sentences just don't meld together well. I think that you really need to take that seriously and look into rewriting it in some way or editing. As writing that doesn't flow loses all the joy of reading.
1/5
Overall:
This book needs some work so that it can become a more enjoyable read. However, with some effort I'm sure you can make this into something more notable.
Final Score:
10/25
